Bittersweet
An Entry for the Sensational II Challenge
I taste: it is the honeyed smoothness of life.
You touch: it is the truculent grittiness of sandpaper.
I see: it is the gracious goodness of light.
You hear: it is the crackle and seering poke of dark.
We smell: it is oxymoronic caramel crisp sweet bitterness.
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Balderdash
My chosen word: Balderdash meaning senseless, stupid, or exaggerated talk or writing; nonsense. I love this word. I love the sound of it as it rolls off the tongue; I love the fact that it is tied up with Britishness; I love using it in the way that it was meant, to say in one word "I don't know what you're talking about, you absolute buffoon", although that sentence in itself is one that makes me smile. When researching the word, the internet also stated this: "Balderdash is a rather out-of-date and archaic word now, with very British overtones. The sort of word a P.G. Wodehouse character might use. Use it in a light-hearted way, therefore, and about something that's pretty trivial." I take umbrage at the "rather out-of-date and archaic" description of this magnificent word. It may not be in general use but I'm keeping it alive and will continue to spout it at every available opportunity.
By Rachel Deemingabout a year ago in Poets
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Bravo! This is truly sensational! Such great word choice in each line to craft quite an experience
Oooo, I learned a new word from you today, truculent! Loved your poem!
An amazing oxymoron of a sensory poem.
Mmmmmm!!! I could have pie.... 😅
Great job 👍🏼… my favourite line is: “ We smell: it is oxymoronic caramel crisp sweet bitterness.”💙
Perspectival contingency melting into consensus. Another impressive, sensual poem!
I seem to recall a quote that the most sincere form of love is the love of food. And this visceral and delicious poem seems to bear that out. I do not recognize the dessert in the accompanying pic, but I definitely want it eat it! Well done, Rachel!
Wonderful! "Truculent grittiness of sandpaper." Well done.
Fantastic descriptions! Well done!
I love finding words I don’t know and truculent was one of them. Very well done on the poem (:
The duality of our sensory experiences is illustrated in a perfect manner through your beautiful poem. And the most important thing is that your work is reflecting, at the same time, and the duality of life.Stunning work!
The way you intertwine moments of joy and sorrow really resonates with the human experience.
Wow! Your diction in this is amazing, Rachel! "truculent grittiness of sandpaper" ( I love 'truculent' in this because the abrasiveness of sandpaper really can be seen as an 'aggressive defiance' along with the implications towards the story in the poem! ) "oxymoronic caramel crisp sweet bitterness" ( oxymoronic again serves a double meaning both to the taste of caramel and to the story! ) You are a master word smith, my friend!! (:
Oxymoronic! (That's a good thing!)