My Heart Cried Instead of me
-
My heart cried instead of me
so its broken tears will be concealed.
I felt the dampness in hidden chambers,
where filtered steel will be revealed.
-
Brethren of my many rivers
are fists of ice at springs to freeze
any emotion that dares be felt
and any threat that chill can cease.
-
Driven by a desperation
to find living beneath a life.
Strewn about are fallen bruises
silently screaming of searing strife.
-
Drug my veins with love and joy.
Pain my lashes in shades of light.
Change the tears to sweat of warmth.
Set aglow the blacks of night.
-
Crack my heart till it's not there.
Cry my tears till I can't see.
Blend my blood in sunset's peace.
Break me till I can no longer be.
About the Creator
Rachel Steinmetz
Written expression is emotion at its peak; delve into it.
Reader insights
Nice work
Very well written. Keep up the good work!
Top insights
On-point and relevant
Writing reflected the title & theme
Masterful proofreading
Zero grammar & spelling mistakes
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Eye opening
Niche topic & fresh perspectives
Expert insights and opinions
Arguments were carefully researched and presented
Easy to read and follow
Well-structured & engaging content
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Keep reading
More stories from Rachel Steinmetz and writers in Poets and other communities.
Comments (16)
Nice to read
So sad ๐๐๐
Congratulations on your top story ๐๐๐
Very beautiful written piece! Wonderfulโจ๐
Blend my blood in sunset's piece, very beautifully written line ๐
It's a good thing you found me or I never would have been here to read your fabulous poem. Thank you!! I will be sure to look for you all the time now!
Well done and well deserved Top Story recognition.
You broke me; a whirlwind of passion
Beautiful ๐
Oh, beautifully written, well done! ๐
This is amazing dear ๐
Oh my!!!!!!!! Congratulations ๐ this one is truly a master piece. Keep writing!!!
Congrats on it.
Beautiful piece. Congrats on the TS.
So so powerful.
Crack my heart till it's not there. Blend my blood in sunset's peace.- wow what lines. You have to teach me how to write like this...