Mid-Breath, Mid-Fall
A Poem in the Pause Between Faith and Frenzy
not exactly,
I say
all the stars are out tonight,
this August night
~
with all the enthusiasm
of an overly fraught—
we wait with baited breath
for the awe-inspiring
~
nightwatchmen
but, my faith is strong
as Perseus, the hero of old,
sends forth arrows
~
and my love
is weakness in the blush,
touched by starlight,
filled with love, honour,
~
and the frenzy
not, out, out, brief candle
in great Ethiopia,
there was a Queen Cassiopeia
~
I say
with all
who ruled her nation
aside her husband Cepheus
~
of a
night watch
and to them
Andromeda was born, their daughter
~
but,
and, in the blush—
beauty was bestowed upon her
with also hubris
~
the frenzy
sex is a tepid form of
retribution
for—
~
Cassiopeia, full of vanity,
did call attention
to her beauty, beauty
that rivalled the sea nymphs
~
the back-to-basics
approach to trust
in her own mind
and angered the great Poseidon
~
but if faith
is the frenzy—
Cetus, legendary beast,
was sent to ravage Ethiopia
~
inhale, exhale
draw the breath—
a compromise was made:
Andromeda was offered as ransom
~
the role
of
the
falling
~
a fair maiden for the nation,
oh, who could save her?
as Perseus first set his eyes
upon the maiden damsel
~
a promise was made,
a pact that set Perseus
on a quest—
~
earth falls
he sought the head
of the great mortal Gorgon, Medusa,
with hair of snakes
~
powers beyond the world he knew,
his wits and wily spirit—
he needed, bravery unbound
~
my breath haunts me,
flowing forward,
from my mouth opened
in agaze—
~
agape drains me
as the coarsest takes his stand.
~
the head he sought,
he did claim
to battle mighty Cetus—
~
the coarsest a foe or no,
hero,
or the t-shirt
in your drawer.
~
with arrows and swords,
gleaming, shining metallic—
and now I am left thinking
~
of everything that
accounts for
banalismistics.
~
he hid and ducked,
slid and ran
and launched attack,
~
brave and true,
he knew what to do,
with blade in hand—
~
he took a swipe
across the neck
of the great Medusa.
~
so, with the dripping,
serpent-crowned terror’s head,
Perseus ventured
across the vast oceans
~
to honour his vow,
not once giving thought
to whether he lived or died—
~
to fight the mighty Cetus
and win the hand of Andromeda,
to win the praise
and derision of the gods themselves
~
Do I ever feel so heroic
and win the praise and derision
of the gods themselves
*
Thanks for reading!
Author's Notes: I had two warring, but connected poems. One was the bones of a very fragmented take on the Somewhere Between Here and There Challenge. The other was for Mike Singleton's August challenge (Which I missed! Sorry, Mike), inspired by the Perseid Meteor Shower and connected t0 Ancient Greek stories of Perseus.
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Comments (11)
What a creative poem, Paul! I loved the lines where you wrote "hero, or the t-shirt in your drawer." And I see now you're making up new words for the dictionary? Is there something you can not do? 😜
"To win the praise and derision of the gods themselves..." Absolutely epic. This is my first read back on Vocal in months, and I couldn't be happier with this reintroduction!! Stellar work, my friend - looking forward to catching up on a few more of your recent works!
The gods are not mocked as we artists know too well. And yet… and yet, we dare their glory with every perfected verse, brave their wrath with every vaunted couplet. That is where true madness lies. We write for fame and glory while giving faint praise to the godlike muse who whispers faintly through our pens. Would we but write for their glory alone? I fear not. It is impossible as you yourself have written here, ‘agape drains me as the coarsest takes his stand.’ We are but carnal creatures who strive like men aping gods. If only it were possible for the profane to sing the praises of the sacred, or the mute to speak of their matchless glory. I remember Orpheus and tremble. This is a lovely and philosophical bit of poesy, Paul. It hast stirred my soul.
I had a strong sense of dejavu reading this. Sir Paul, what does banalismistics mean? I Googled it but nothing came up 😅😅 Loved your poem! 🍩🥐
I loved your analysis and synopsis of the myths!! nice writing.
I love the references to Greek mythology and constellations. It shows a lot of knowledge in these things to be able to pull it all together. Well done!
What a beautiful journey through your mind and thoughts gilded in greek mythology. I like that the language was separate from your everyday speech, it pulls us back in time, and brings the journey alive. The words in bold really helps the transition from one line to the other. I like that it's dramatised, especially here. '...inhale, exhale...' I like the pondering at the end. Whether you could ever feel so heroic. Fantastic work Paul 👏🏾👌🏾🤗❤️
A compelling concatenation of the classical and the contemporary, my liege!
I read this twice, Paul, and loved it! Beautiful work!
The map drew me into your magical wordstorm, excellent work
What a poem to describe some mythological people and even said constellations we see at night. Good work.