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ladybugs swarm the front door
knocking for an entity that won't answer.
the noxious aroma of pyrazine emits
a reminder that good luck can turn sour.
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Ashley Lima
I think about writing more than I write, but call myself a writer as opposed to a thinker.
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Comments (29)
This is so good. Insightful and sensory loved it! 🫶
"Good luck can turn sour" Wow if there was ever a more true statement, I don't I've ever heard of read it. Lovely poem :)
love it! congrats! ❤️
Well deserving poem
This is great, Ashley. Loved the fact that you taught me a new word too. Congrats on it getting Top Story. Loved it!
This is a wonderful poem and very deserving of Top Story.
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Now, I have never been a big fan of haiku (I know this isnt haiku, but its brief, succinct, laden) but sometimes someone can do so much with so few, well chosen words and images, and I can recognise the skill of brevity.
Congratulations on achieving top story status!
I had to look up pyrazine and after getting a convoluted explanation and complicated diagrams of molecular structure, I added "in ladybirds" which made it much clearer. Great poem.
I am learning so many new words!
Ahhh, Yes. It's that time a year. A bunch were buzzing by my back door just a few days ago. Congrats, Ashley!
Fabulous!!! Congratulations on Top Story too!!!💕❤️❤️
Pooor ladybugs 🐞
Back with congrats! 🤍
sad but true, we never think of how fortunate we are. You said it in so few words
Such a lovely way to describe that
Ah, yes, those lovely little stinkers!
Like vampires, they can't come in uninvited. I wish.
This was clever. Well done.
It’s that last line for me that really created a story. Imagining an aroma from baking cookies, feeling like good luck is in the air, then seeing a swarm of ladybugs. But at the same time, the shape of that compound resembles the insect. Meant to be? Loving the depth to my interpretations, haha, even if they make no sense. 😆💜
I remember one building in my undergrad had one specific room infested with lady bugs lol. Either way, great imagery and I loved it.
Loving the word Pyrazine! Beautifully written though I have never been swarmed by a lovelines -Can't imagine that being particularly lovely! 🤍
I'm so afraid of ladybugs and seeing that would have terrified me! 😅 Loved your poem! Hope you're doing well!
This poem created a strong and poignant image in my head.