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With love lost forever in the then,
when six feet of dirt marks the now,
the we mourns infinity.
And I can’t help wonder
how so it can be
I feel so me,
so alive
without
you.
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Cathy holmes
Canadian family girl with a recently discovered love for writing. Other loves include animals and sports.
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Comments (21)
Intense! Loved it and happy to see it was honoured!
Death is the ultimate breakup. Beautiful work Cathy.
Nice ❤️
I can't decide which one I like better! You are on firrrrre
Brilliant. 🥰
Oh!! Love the empowering feel of this piece Cathy!! Great work!
Wow. Such a powerful piece, Cathy! This is masterfully created!
Splendid and thoughtful work Cathy. You always have a way with words with complex thoughts and feelings!
I love the atmosphere of this one. Remarkable job!
Well-wrought! Gotta say, Cathy, when I first encountered your work here, it was good, but every time I read something new of yours, I find myself more impressed with the development of your narrative voice and style. There's depths of wisdom in your work, from your descriptions of your family, to your wistful insights, to your sense of humor. I've been here since 2021, and I've really enjoyed watching so many people develop. Do we develop the written word or does it develop us? One thing is certain: a symbiotic harmony is achieved.
This one is going to linger with me a bit. Excellent work, Cathy!
Striking, deeply moving. What an excellent entry!
Ohm this is beautifully sad. From a purely technical side, I love the play with words like then/now, we/I, you/me. What an awesome entry this is, buddy! Great work.
Oh wow, this was so powerful! I loved your nonetheless! Hehehehhehehe
Sad but beautiful
Wonderful! Great entry!
Well, this sets the bar really high. I might as well start over, lol. Seriously though, it perfectly describes the imperfections of the relationship and the want/need to break free.
WOW! This is heartbreaking and poignant. Great entry!!
Oh, this one has the feels. 🥹 But I do dare say it packs a settle punch at the end that sits with the reader! Awesome job, my friend!
Heartfelt!!! Absolutely superb!!!♥♥♥
Wow. What an ending. This is an absolutely brilliant poem.