Lost at Sea
(This is more of an experimental style. Mainly free verse. What do you think? I’d love to hear your thoughts!)
Waves of you keep crashing into me.
Crushing,
drifting in the tidal pools, I’m trapped,
Breathless.
***
Suffocating on the jagged coral.
Beautiful,
but dangerous. Which way is up?
Kicking,
***
but going nowhere.
Struggling,
stuck within the current
Electric.
***
Blue lightening strikes
Ionic, I rise.
A storm cloud
floating
***
over saturated sand
made of glass crystals.
Thank you for reading this short poem. Let me know in the comments if you like it, and/or what it means to you.
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KJ Aartila
A writer of words in northern WI with a small family and a large menagerie.
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Comments (12)
Such a good read and the image goes so well.
This one I like. Sometimes using rhyming words forces the words. Free verse allows feelings to run free and you can use exactly the right word in the right place. What's more important, after all: sharing that moment, that feeling, that sense with a reader, or finding something to rhyme with snit? B
Love the images and how the rhythm reminds me of the coming in & going out of the waves. Powerful!
Really liked this article
Good read. Well done.
Well done!
Good read. Well done.
Fantastic!!!
Wonderful, impactful lines. It felt like a struggle in the beginning following by a powerful breaking free followed by ease in the end. Wonderfully written!
This is great. The one word lines give more power and passion to the ones preceding. Well done.
I like this style a lot. Makes it easy to express a point, like Heather Hubler said, punches....very nice
Oh, I liked this! I thought the one-word lines felt like punches (or lightening strikes) which lent to the overall tone you were creating. Loved the line "Ionic, I rise." Great work!