In formation
Molecules on the brink
When the temperature plummets
The wild ones settle down
Those in flight lose their momentum, they seek a place to land and regroup
Condensing on anything cool and smooth
Those phrenetic ones
Those little buzzing kinetic ones
Those party molecules
Who roil and roam with their fellows,
They stop their raves
For now they only have the energy to
Mill about
They begin to line up
Outside your window
For the Great Calm
They get in formation
Not for battle but for your information
They crystallize
On the pane
And they shimmer in the starlight
All to tell you
You
Should
Stay
Under
Your
Blankets
Those molecules
They still have a pulse, but they wonβt rave or fly again,
Not until the sun comes next Spring
They have formed rigid marriages,
Like fairy-sized gemstones
Because thatβs the way they like to freeze.
They click and clack as they huddle in step
A billion tiny firecrackers
Lining up side by side,
Rank and file
And in the grass
Below your window the frost creaks as it claims the fallen leaves
The moisture has all left the air, there is only oxygen and nitrogen
And all of it chilled to an electric blue
Crack your window:
Can you smell it?
The air is pure of all water
Zero percent humidity
Except where you breathe,
Plumes of dragon smoke rush from your lungs to the dry, empty air
Breathe it in,
Cold,
Scratch some of the frost with your thumbnail
If you were to go outside, into the night,
Youβd crunch the frosted leaves beneath your slippers
There is a puddle out there
With a layer of glass over its surface
And an ocean of liquid water underneath
A puddle
The model
Of Jupiterβs moons
If you were to
Step
Gently,
Just hard enough to crack the ice
But not hard enough to plunge your toes into the frigid sea,
You would see the space
Beneath your shivers
Beneath your slipper
Beneath your soul
And beneath your sole
Where molecules are on the brink
The tipping point
These waters are the last remnants of fall, holding out against the steady approach of winter
And if you were to press an ear to the cold surface
Maybe you would hear them
Molecules
Clicking and clacking
Clicking
And
Clacking
Into formation
The waters are losing
They are freezing
This puddle will not last the night
About the Creator
Sam Spinelli
Trying to make human art the best I can, never Ai!
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Comments (38)
Congratulations on the win. This poem made me smile.
Many messages from this poem. Using nature in a clever way to speak about truths beyond it. A unique technique.
I love how you bring it back to the puddle
Well deserved win! This is a delightfully intriguing poem! I especially like: β Plumes of dragon smoke rush from your lungs to the dry, empty air Breathe it in, Cold,βπ
Congrats on winning the contest! It was well deserved. I adored how your poem used senses on an atomic level!
Ah congrtulations Sam! Brilliant. Loved the repetition part with 'Those' and that ending line feels so sad.
I love the blend of science, art and the senses in your poem, Sam. A kinetic and eclectic masterpiece! Congrats on the win. Richly deserved!
Brilliant, vivid, magical work, Sam!! This is such a well-deserved win; every last molecule of your wordsmithing is stellar, here. :)
Outstanding, my friend! So happy for you! And the fact that you included bits of science, elevated this even more for me. Super congrats to you!
Congratulations on the win. It's so well deserved. You have a unique take on the challenge that's also extremely well crafted and uses rich language and effective line breaks. "Those phrenetic ones...Those little buzzing kinetic ones..." what a great phrase. Really wonderful read. Well done!
Sam, congratulations on your win! I love the imagery; fairy gemstones, firecrackers, clicking clacking molecules, dragon's smoke- well doneβ£ππ₯³
What a brilliant way to give life to what we often deem lifeless -
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! ππππππ
Badass. I love this.
Congratulations! This is a pleasure to read.
Congratulations π I love the molecule "clicking and clacking" imagery. science meets art β€οΈ
Congratulations on your win Sam βΊοΈππΎπ
Congratulations!
ππΎππΎππΎ Congratulations Sam!
This is beautiful and unique! Congratulations, Sam!!
Congrats on your winning piece itβs palpable in its intensity and you def deserve it!
Congratulations Sam!
also that last night brought all of the rest home. So deserved
WOO HOO! GO SAM! This was wonderful
Oh wow Sam this was well deserving! Congrats! How I wish I was under some blankets right now