Hostages of the Hourglass
Time brought them together but what destiny unites, life divides
An old hourglass held them both hostage
She gazed at him from the upper bulb
The elusive sand flowed into the lower bulb
Where he was running out of space
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He begged desperately for her to help
She just couldn't stop crying
Because everything she tried had failed
But there was one way, though
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Old hourglasses had one major flaw
Their upper and lower bulbs weren't one piece
They were connected by a cord at their union
Coated with wax to hold them together
~~~~~
She knew she had to melt the wax
She set herself on fire for that
The melted wax disconnected the bulbs
He broke free and ran to his lover
~~~~~
While her ashes mixed with the sand
He and his lover led a beautiful life together
He never thought about her once
Although she sacrificed her life to save his
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Comments (44)
What a beautiful but painful analogy. I admire her for her selflessness. Even though she had to melt the wax. I like the imagery of both of them in the old hourglass. What's funny is that this lover would never be able to replace her. Even though he never thought about her once. Because her beauty is on the inside. Something hard enough to cultivate. While the outer one fades. This was outstanding Dharr, one of my favourites from you π€β€οΈ
Beautiful Words, Thankyou xx
Tragically beautifulβ¦ I had no idea how hourglasses were made in the pastβ¦ fascinating β .
'While her ashes mixed with the sand He and his lover led a beautiful life together He never thought about her once' This was heart wrenching, I don't get emotional over romance but this one was sad. That line got to me.
Sad powerful images! Well done!
"She knew she had to melt the wax She set herself on fire for that The melted wax disconnected the bulbs He broke free and ran to his lover" This speaks so much of sacrifice for an emotionally unhealthy or unavailable relationship. After he got what he wanted from her, he just disappeared. Many people, of both sexes, are like this, but I can assure you that not all people are this way. Keep faith in true love, My Morbid Friend.
Oh wow, that was good. He did not deserve her sacrifice
Wow! Well done! A poem I missed ππ
What Women can do for Love and they almost never get it or feel from the man it's true real and heartbreaking to experience Beautiful creative way capturing it β€οΈπ§‘π§‘π§‘π§‘β€οΈβ€οΈ
Really charming, but unspeakably sad poem. Much applause!
Dharrsheena, this was a really emotional piece for me! I could feel the pain of the upper bulb, she gave up everything for him and he didn't even notice. Such a sad ending, but what a beautiful metaphor for what often happens in a relationship and what leads to couples breaking up. I fell in love with this analogy you've created, the idea that one gives everything for the other and the latter never knows... It's so beautiful and tragic!
Executed with style and aplomb!
Lesson learned. Never burn yourself for an ungrateful toad of a man! Beautiful work π
Another fantastic poem! I would love to hear your feedback on my story!
Very clever take on an hour glass. Very sad π but beautifully done.
Nice poem! Thanks for sharing
What a beautiful extended metaphor - I loved it!
Nice imagery.
Didn't realize THIS was YOURS When I shared it on my FB profile a few days ago WOW! Kinda cool! Feeling it!
Gorgeous. So well done!
Tragic and sad.
I like!
Sad and so well written
Very sad π’ Bravo π
Nicely written!