When Things Get Too Heavy
We reach our breaking point
It was all too heavy
The weight of it all
Was just
Too
Heavy
She wanted to let go
But it was pulling her down
Dragging her
Through its darkest depths
She tried to break free
It was pointless
Like quicksand
It started to swallow her
She struggled to get out
It made her sink even deeper
She needed to let go
But how?
She already tried struggling
Then she remembered
Quicksand loosens up
When we stop struggling
She learned to relax
It let her go
She felt lighter
She was floating
In the vast ocean
She went with the flow
Of the current and the waves
It was so much easier
So much lighter
She felt the bliss
She wanted to float forever
For it was a beautiful feeling
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A poem that feels like blues. Now I feel good and I was truly excited, I almost felt jealous.:)) But well done, because I will never forget this beautiful poem. A ripple in my heart and a sense of optimism.
There's something about this shade of blue and her just floating there. Sometimes trying really becomes pointless. Struggling against a natural thing is the thing that causes us to sink deeper. Just like you've said. I like how she learned in the end what yields the best result. To relax and just let go. Fantastic work as always Dharr π€β€οΈ
Beautiful imagery. Such a great lesson in this poem. Love it.
Your words beautifully capture the struggle and journey of letting go, your imagery of quicksand and the transformative effect of relaxation is inspiring, amazing job, thanks for sharing!
This is DEEP. Might be just me but I felt myself submerging. Powerful writing!
I loved this, the dark beginning and the light ending, as always so beautifully written!
incredible poem...indeed letting go is a great relief but its hard to let go too.... nice poem..
Letting go, even for a little while, is worth it. If it's something that you need to pick up again, you can when you have an emotional rest.
oh wow Dharrsheena, this was so beautiful and honest. You speak for anyone who has struggled and finally accepted it. If you see your number of reads going up on this it is me re reading it over and over.
This one also holds up so well to what I remember it to be!! It's uplifting, breath taking and such a great refresher about the perils of dwelling on the struggles of life and what happens when you fight too hard or forget what's actually worth fighting for! Great work Dharrsheena! π©΅
Wonderful work as always, this is a powerful piece of poetry.
Girl, you hit a nerve in me. I love this.
This is a valuable message. A way to strive...or not strive, but rest.
Dharrsheena, this was such a relatable piece for me! I loved the wording and flow of it, it was emotionally evoking and yet uplifting! Great work my friend! π
This is beautiful, Dharrsheena! I imagined it was addressing worry. Life's worries can drag us down, and the more we worry about a problem, the heavier the burden. As the saying goes, βWorrying does not take away tomorrow's troubles. It takes away today's peace.β This was a beautiful poem, with layered meanings!
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Very nice.
A lovely metaphor for dealing with life's challenges.πAnneliese
grt writing.........
BRILLIANT!
Very nice dear:)
nice :)
Unforgiveness surely feels like this. The quicksand. The struggle. Then you release and accept where you are and how you feel. It is forgiveness at its best. Love this poem. May I read it for my YouTube Channel and link back here?
Fabulous!!! Absolutely fabulous!!!πππ
Excellent