Dear Reader caution you these words. This prose, this rambling of a darker kind may disturb your musings. For it is written in the view of a deranged mind. In the perspective of a killer who knows only the depravity that swirls inside the decadence of warped sensibilities. So go yee forth with armor to fortify thy soul, to protect thy innocence. Or if thine truly desire the ugly rapture of the shadows of our world then proceed to thine unpleasantry openly. -
Deep breaths of you breathed in, sweet coppery smells, filling me up, with a dream I took away
I keep visions, of last desperate looks, of love spilling out in claret, of light fading from eyes, locked inside of me
Seems like forever now, I left you lying, in pools of life, flowing across a floor, where we held so tightly, to the idea of us
There are too many ghosts, skeletons dancing from graves, to bury them inside the closets of what I've done
Replace me, replace my bloody hands, erase your red heart from my skin, take back the baptism, I bathed you in
Ambulances sing their siren songs, melodies of love, inside a symphony of midnight, playing just for you
Counting the uniforms, scurrying behind yellow tape, I contemplate how they captured the beast
Time is a silly friend my love, haunting me in the trap you set, inside your last goodbye, my escape lost in amber flashes of blue
I promise you, my fallen angel, my beautiful distraction, even though your revenge is wrapped around my wrists, I will never let you go
Our affair will live on, for always and always, forever captured in crimson memories of you, to wash over me
Now, the only thing I have left, is a hope to see your heavenly shape outlined under a sheet of white, before they finally take me away
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Comments (18)
😮 speechless! I kept coming back to this line, "Replace me, replace my bloody hands, erase your red heart from my skin, take back the baptism". So much so I nearly missed out on that strong finish. Fuck me! 😮
Oh wow, that was chilling and disturbing! I really loved it, the completely different perspective and mindset. Well done!
Chilling. Loved the intro too - set the mood perfectly.
Oh my, this is gorgeous, haunting, and so touching, Will! You really pulled my in with that note in the beginning, and the poem did not disappoint. Such yearning, reminiscence, and heartache in this---tied together with beautiful imagery 🥹❤️❤️ Sooo well done!
Will, I love the note to the reads at the beginning, it really helps set the note! However, I must admit this is a lot darker than you usually go! But I am all here for it! It was such a bone chilling narrative, with an intense but suffering love that radiated out of the narrator for the victim! Honestly this was terrifying and breath taking! Great work!
Damn!! That was brilliantly creepy and what fantastic imagery. You nailed this assignment. Bravo!
Darkly excellent words
Good work well done.
I agree with Paul. Def some Poe kind of depth here. Really a poem for the ages here. Dark, foreboding and lovely.
Phenomenal work! full of dark eloquence; so beautifully written!
Magnificent piece! Love the content warning lol. This is a serious contender and Poe is rolling in his grave green with envy.
This is a phenomenal piece. Your narrative is reminiscent of the old world yet entirely modern in its darkness. Well done Will!
it covers the incident from so many levels. I read it twice to fully grasp it
Your intro was definitely on point. It almost felt like it should have ended with "and now enter the Twilight Zone." The first half of this made me think this would be a good description of how the narrator of "Porphyria's Lover" mind was when he wrapped her hair around her neck to forever trap their love in that moment of time.
Bravo!!! The content warning itself was enough to pull me in. This entire piece was dark and creative. Hats off, my friend.
Hehehehehehe, you made my day with this poem! I couldn't stop grinning reading every line. The copper smell, light fading from eyes, crimson memories, the chalk outline, I loved them all! So brilliant!
This is a very gorgeous poem from beginning to end 👏👏👏👏
So dark, reminds me of Poe or similar. There's a definite beauty to the dark words. The flow is stunning and although I really could pick out a bunch of lines, this one made me smile "Ambulances sing their siren songs, melodies of love, inside a symphony of midnight, playing just for you" just love the thought of ambulance siren being a song for the dead woman. Impressive work, as always, Will!