Honey on their lips,
but beneath—a jaw that snaps.
Strike first. Tame the beast.
About the Creator
Komal
I write poems and stories that hit the feels.
When I’m not lost in my own plots, I’m either daydreaming about the next big idea or just winging life with a grin.
𝕀 𝕙𝕒𝕧𝕖 𝕥𝕙𝕖 ℙ𝕠𝕨𝕖𝕣 𝕥𝕠 𝕞𝕒𝕜𝕖 𝕒𝕟 𝕀𝕄ℙ𝔸ℂ𝕋
'20/20'
"Do It Again" the track that would ultimately open the Beach Boys final album on Capitol Records which was released on February 10th 1969 had originally been released as a single in August of 1968. The track was the first of many post-Pet Sounds era throwbacks to the early Beach Boys sound which would become continually more cliched and eventually lead the Beach Boys to the level of self-parody they would eventually succumb to in the 1980s while their closest contemporaries The Beatles nearing the end of their run in 1969 would go on to be viewed as the most influential band of all time. However, the song itself is not bad on its surface, and it opens with a futuristic sounding (for 1969) drumbeat captured by then-Beach Boys engineer Stephen Desper using tape delays on the drums performed by Dennis Wilson and John Guerin. The song has been re-recorded numerous times over the years on various Beach Boys-related projects most notably the 2011 re-recording at Capitol studios featuring the five surviving Beach Boys at the time backed instrumentally by various members of both the Brian Wilson Band and Mike Loves touring "Beach Boys" to promote the then upcoming Beach Boys 50th Anniversary reunion tour in 2012. The hammering and power drill sound at the end of the song was an excerpt from a track called "Workshop" that was to be a part of the uncompleted "SMiLE" album.
By Sean Callaghan7 days ago in Beat
Comments (20)
Yowza! Haiku that bites!! 😍
This would make a great story. Excellent Haiku!
Wow. What a fierce haiku! Well done.
Love how this turns elegance into warning. “Honey on their lips” says it all — beauty masking danger.
And that's a smart one, Komal! And chilling!
Circling back to say congrats on honourable mention in this week's leaderboard, Komal!!
Congratulations!
you truly "hit the feel" with this one! Fantastic!
A Cobra Kaiku? Well-wrought!
Oh! A haiku with a bite. Love it, Komal
Yep! So good, Komal.
Good job!
I love how this haiku blends sweetness with danger in such a powerful way.
So good. Love the partial rhymes — lips/snaps and beneath/beast which adds to the flow while showcasing the effectively jarring ‘strike’. 🤗
Ah yes, gilding.- a golden veneer. lDiscerning it is vital to avoid getting struck first 😳 vivid imagery on this one!
Ooooo! I love the bite to this Komal!! (pun definitely intended)
Good luck on first strike. By the time we know danger.....
Gilding is a perfect choice. Sometimes the sad truth is covered with a thin layer of gold.
Makes me think of people who I’ve known who were kind on the surface but cruel on the inside.
I’m not sure how to interpret this.