Dreams Over Her II
Read my fourth letter.
The day arrived soon, Her silence broke
Her heart busted and she continued to choke;
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Pt. II
She was a poetess her voice was her ink
She bled her pen as her voice began to sink
The vows of their oneness were all recalled
She couldn't feel her soul while she scrawled
"I cherished every moment of our love and haste;
The time of struggle, for me, wasn't a waste;
I gave you my life, my eyes, my tears;
But losing you wasn't on the list of my fears!"
The grey filter on his eye blackened all beauty in her
The streamy threads of her hair looked nothing more than fur
It hit her harder than a dart to see her Letter in that state
Tears won the race against the words on that page
"It wasn't your fault, I was at mistake;
To let you put me on the sole-stake;
Fighting was our hobby, hugging was our passion;
Or these were all my hobbies? But you seemed to have compassion! "
It was the third letter, She burnt every page soon after
She hated the quietness, she missed their laughter
His dreams and his FAME, it was something so strange
She never wanted 'cash', for his heart she could change
"Why did you bring me home, if you would leave me?
Why would your smile prison me, when you gave me the key?
Why would you make me addicted to that sweet smile of yours?
When you made it vanish, shut the lock on all the doors!"
While Donating her blood, She realized she shed for the wrong group
That letter too was trash— Another letter, It was an endless loop
Soon a final letter, her guilts, her taunts to her debtor
Cold breeze rushed there, the place where he met her
"I thought you and I would make it till forever;
But your plans to me seemed a bit cleverer;
I was wiping all your sweat but you didn't seem to care;
You are now far beyond my reach—My echoes, you would hear;"
He would miss her silent giggles, her endless byes, her only fear
Her sparkling eyes, her; "pushing him some near"
For she was leaving him all alone, he was all grown
She was leaving behind every belonging of her own
So, Ending that never-ending iteration of —"Hi!";
Packing up all and saying my last —"Bye";
"Every story doesn't end happily like ours", you cried;
That movie was true, Our story ended and characters died!"
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Author's note:
It has come to an end! As the boy said, love stories don't always have a happy ending.
Thank you for sticking with me <3
I'd love to hear your comments on this one :)
Part I:
About the Creator
Maryam Batool
I'm 17
I'm a storyteller who loves poems, fiction, and romance. Creativity is my constant companion. I take joy in turning thoughts into worlds. Writing is my way of exploring life and connecting with others
Ready to let my writing bloom!
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Comments (8)
Maryam ...this is stunning! The feel, the emotions and the way you express such vulnerability. Could take it in as my very own pain. So wonderfully written.
Wow, this hits like a wave—so raw and beautifully intense! The rhythm of her emotions, the loop of letters, and that bittersweet finality are woven with such care💖. It’s a gut punch wrapped in poetry. What a way to end a story—heartbreaking but real. Amazing work!✨🤗 Btw, I wonder, why I didn't get your new story notification, but thankfully I saw it.
Excellent
This is a deeply moving and emotionally charged poem. The raw vulnerability and the intense pain expressed in the words is palpable. The poem is a testament to the enduring power of love and the devastating impact of heartbreak.
That was heartbreaking conclusion! well done!
That is so deep and heartbreaking!🥹 You've perfectly crafted the words so that such a perfect piece is written! "Why would your smile prison me, when you gave me the key?" I loved that line🌿✨ Well done Maryam!💕😊
"While Donating her blood, She realized she shed for the wrong group" Whoaaaa, this line freaking blew my mind!! Like I keep rereading that line and I can't seem to stop!
This is such a sad ending, I am still completely silent. You have written with such depth that there is pain and struggle in every line. I always admire your rhyming, it’s truly your greatest strength. I love poems like this, from today onwards, I swear I want to read more. This is a very beautiful story. This is my favorite part ✨ "I cherished every moment of our love and haste; The time of struggle, for me, wasn't a waste; I gave you my life, my eyes, my tears; But losing you wasn't on the list of my fears!