Don't
An Inverse entry
I love you more than anything
Sometimes I forget, maybe you do too, but
Those words don't have any meaning
How many lines do we have to cross, before we say
Don't hold me, when I cry out for you
Don't call my name, when I need to find you
Words were never ghosts, until I heard you say
Every time I feel your touch pressed against me
I get lost in the whirlwind of what could be
Your deep blue eyes look at me, and I have to say
All the lakes we swam together in have frozen
All the leaves we covered our branches with have fallen
How can we face the truth, if you keep promising
We built homes inside each other's hearts
We buried ourselves inside each other's souls
If thoughts were ink, tattoed on my body, they would say
Our words bled from a thousand cuts, we sliced into our skin
Our puzzle doesn't fit anymore, our pieces are too broken
Love is supposed to be honest, you can't keep pretending
We could write a different ending
Our story won't change, no matter how much you wish
Peter loved Wendy, the way Cinderella loved Charming
The way
I love you more than anything
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Standing While Falling
Quotation from Friedrich Nietzsche "He who wrestles long with monsters should beware lest he himself become a monster. And if you gaze long into an abyss, the abyss also gazes into you. Man is not destroyed by suffering, but by the meaning he makes of it."
By LUCCIAN LAYTH6 days ago in Critique
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"We buried ourselves inside each other's souls" - what a line though
Wowza...you hit me right in the face with this one. Fantastic job
Hi-i - You so often seem to pop out memories within me - Whew ~ This was a Biggie. You are an incredible talent as a creative-communicator. Best to you, j.in.la.
Such evocative lines! I also loved the ink line 🥰
Ooh this is so nuanced. Love is so fickle. Wonderful piece!
This works so perfectly inasmuch as most relationships involve some ebb & flow where reading down or reading up seems more appropriate depending upon the time & situation. Beautifully crafted, Invisi.
Our story won't change, no matter how much you wish Peter loved Wendy, the way Cinderella loved Charming These lines hit me so hard because I always wished Peter loved Wendy. It also reminded me of Taylor Swift's song, Cardigan. In that song, there's these lines: Tried to change the ending Peter losing Wendy I'm so sorry, I'm rambling at this point. Your poem worked so well both ways and you nailed this challenge!
Well done, these are tricky!
Brilliant & beautiful!!! Loved it!!!💕♥️♥️
Lovely writing IW!
Great poem! Life happens that way...sad.
What a bittersweet poem. It was very well written. Loved it!
I must say lakes are freezing all over the place. If you elabrated a bit more this would make a great entry for the other challenge on love, ugh. Relatable and honest in every way.
All the lakes we swam together in have frozen.. what a great line!! Gorgeous.
This is absolutely gorgeous poetry. Every line hits harder than the last but this one, "If thoughts were ink, tattoed on my body, they would be saying / Our words bled from a thousand cuts" really got me.
Great inverse!
Heartwrenching and beautiful at the same time. Well done.
"We built homes inside each other's hearts" ~ poignant yet sad. A very beautiful piece.