i want to crawl into myself
put my hands around my knees
i want to sit and rock and hide awhile
find a momentary peace
i want to be absorbed
into this very skin i’m in
parts of it thick like heavy armour
and parts of it so whisper thin
i want to walk into myself
fit in snug and straitjacket tight
slip away from the good and the bad
and away from the dark and the light
i want to be in with my parts
at a level subatomique
this is where the futures are made
to the hum of a soundless shriek
i want to be a vapour
ride the air to all my pores
this is my delusion
and here i'm free from physical laws
i want to slide between my layers
i want the
IN
beyond my skin
that gap between the crack in the slack
straight to the centre of my within
About the Creator
Bren
"It's just a token of my extreme!" - Frank Zappa
"Cause it's all in the heat of the moment It's all in the pain!!!" - Devin Townsend
Centre Stage with the wonderful Heather Hubler
I'm writing it out not acting in doubt!
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Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
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Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
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Comments (20)
This was a great poem wow, new subscriber for sure!
Congratulations on TS! Beautiful poem. I love the way your words made me see this image of crawling into oneself. Skilfully done 😊
This is fantastic. Congrats on the well deserved TS.
This is wicked!! Tone, pace and rhyme are just perfect!! 👏👏 What is that image - it’s cool! 😁 Anyway congrats on another top story B!
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Congratulations on Top Story, Well deserve 👏🏽
This was viscerally exciting! Truly you have a unique mind
Wow!!! This is an excellent poem! Very powerful and the imagery is amazing, great job!
I WANT THAT TOOOOOOO!!! Just saying. 😋 Excellent, and I do mean EXCELLENT poetry! You broke way past top story levels. Congratulations!
This is incredibly written. Simultaneously unique and relatable. Really well deserved top story!
I have no words, but well done.
absolutely adore how the tenseness is conveyed through the line breaks, and the rhythm of your words reflect the real-time rhythm of unpleasant thoughts
The flow was wonderful. Congrats
Congratulations!!!
Excellent! And I loved 'Repo Man' too!
Brilliantly written and highly relatable. Well done!
This was like so relatable and you've conveyed it so poetically!
Absolutely brilliant Brenton. We all feel that way from time to time when the world conspires to wreck our psyche. Crawl into a hole and pull a big rock in over us. Great job.
This is brilliant, well done.
Yes. The fliw was perfect and so playfully clever