
Finally exhausted of arbitrary demands,
the ultimatum came to the table,
slouching, like Yeats’s beast on the way to Bethlehem,
prefaced with “maybe” and “probably won’t happen,”
It’s all she ever wanted: to erase me from your life, while you lavish attention
on her little dog, tell her she’s the only woman in the world,
pay an exorbitant premium
to ensure this house of cards
kills a witch
when it tumbles down.
About the Creator
Harper Lewis
I'm a weirdo nerd who’s extremely subversive. I like rocks, incense, and all kinds of witchy stuff. Intrusive rhyme bothers me.
I’m known as Dena Brown to the revenuers and pollsters.
MA English literature, College of Charleston
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Comments (10)
Emotions so deeply heartfelt, resonates with so many. Kudos on the spotlight.
A powerful bit of poetic art, Harper. Congratulations on being spotlighted in the Raise Your Voice Thread with this wonderful piece. Well done.
Intriguing poem… emotive.
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Love the imagery in this poem and the raw emotion. Wonderfully written.
This feels brittle in the best way, like everything is about to collapse at once.
Sharp, biting, and beautifully controlled. The imagery lands hard, and that final turn is devastating in the best way.
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The allusions, the metaphor "house of cards," the sarcasm, and the ironic tone ("kills a witch" and "tumbles down") show that you know exactly where to reach to bring a visceral imagery of how you feel. No abstract thought was found here. I understand and felt your misery and their treachery. ♥️🤗🖤
Pretty good!
Another great one. Well done lass. I'm a fan. I bet tragic princess can't write like you.