Cacoethes

The song came to my mind: “I belong elsewhere with body, heart, and mind…” You belong to another planet, my dear. To the world of the “extra-artists.”

This is such a strikingly raw yet powerfully eloquent piece - so rich with feeling and deep experience. Wonderful work- thank you so much for submitting it to my challenge!! :)

Losing one's sense of self is devastating

I just reread this….absolutely one of the best pieces of all time. Not joking, not trying to say it just because. This pulls at every fabric we are made of.

Too sad😢 … surely there are bright spots in life🤔. I learnt a new word… tristful✅🤗.

‘I want to sew my eyes shut’ and I want to read that line one more time. Ooo ‘tristful’ a new word that I’ve never seen before. I like how there’s repetition, but then the atmosphere changes and darkened and it held my attention. Describing yourself as a ladder, a car and a utensil, breaks my heart. You have such a way with words as it relates to expressing the deeper, darker more complex parts of the human experience. I felt it, I related to it and I understood it. A masterpiece 👏🏽👌🏽🤗♥️

A beautiful poem.

Heartbreak can be powerful feel, very well written

Oh my god, Dharrsheena! This poem is heart-wrenching and beautiful. I really enjoyed the repetition, just continuing to drive the theme home again and again. This was so good, I loved it!

Dharrsheena, be thou not tristful for thou art a shining soul, a beacon to those lost and floundering in the night. As your blacklight shines forth from your literary works, your heartlight illuminates the path beneath. Nice work.

Interesting and delicious content, keep posting more.

Using the metaphor of ladder and car is an excellent essence of helping each other without the intention of own benefit.

Your words evoke a profound sense of longing. The desire to disconnect from the pain of heartbreak is understandable, yet it also speaks to the depth of your capacity to feel deeply. The metaphor of the shapeshifting puzzle piece is a poignant reflection on the struggle to find one's place in the world. Great job mate! Many thanks for sharing!

I can definitely relate to this, sad as it is. You have a way with words! Beautifully written piece

A people pleaser, always so giving and adaptable. And the view of themselves where they see that they are withered and battered... only to still be the on the outside of it all. Saddening. Aw, let's invite them in!

A very emotive piece of writing. Leaves one to reflect for a while. My reflection: Heartache SUCKS!

My favorite part: "I'm just a catalyst Standing outside, always looking in A cacoethes to belong" Great writing, heartfelt!

Really good poem, I can definatly relate. Great job

This is so beautiful! One of my favorite pieces I’ve read!

Dear Creator of the year, I a humble writer wishes to express my heartfelt congratulations. Seeing your name highlighted for this award is such a great way to start the year, Looking forward to reading more of your works in 2024 Jason

I love this one. It speaks to the feelings of abandonment so well. Good job!

dark and relatable, I loveee it

Very dark, but very powerful at the same time. Good writing!