Ellipsism
Entombed by the melancholia of missing out on a future together
Nobody can hear a scream in the vacuum of space
Or so they say
Within the depths
Of star-scattered galaxies
Floating in this aeonian void
Her screams were all that I could auralize
Amplified a million times
Attained crescendo
My mind tormented me with all her screams
Her scream of ebullience
When I returned home after several months
Her scream of incredulity
When I said I'm leaving again on another mission
Her scream of denial
When I told her how long I'll be gone
Her scream of devastation
When I said I might not survive to return to Earth
Her scream of agony
When I bid her farewell
The loop repeated continuously
A never-ending cacophonous mantra
Incipient epiphany
Do I need this pyrrhic victory?
Is my mission worth losing her?
Losing me?
Losing us?
Isn't there a panacea for this?
I reminisced our halcyon
Our propinquity
I'm unable to handle this anymore
A scream of anguish left my throat
I'm glad it cannot travel through vacuum
Because I wouldn't want her to hear me perish
Cerebrally
Corporeally
Permanently
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Comments (131)
Many times I feel as if I’m in space and no one can hear me when I scream. As if I’m a shadow in the beyond, trying to communicate with earthly aliens. A very beautiful piece. It brings out many voices and messages, and I like that he’s glad she can’t hear him, because that way it means he truly loves her.
Crafted well! Bonus: You gave me a LOT of new words to look up. Original and classic Dharrsheena with a twist!
Hearing a scream in the vacuum of space, that was such a great idea for an opening line. There's just something about these two words together, 'aeonian void'. It's like they belong and they were never apart. Makes me think that your plan for each writeup has a clever method behind it. Then you completed the first line with the sixth line. Then the sixth line with the 32nd line. I like how her screams drew meaning from many different words. How is this both heartless and selfless all at once 'do I need this pyrrhic victory'. 'because I wouldn't want her to hear me perish' you have gotten us emotionally attached to him, emotionally attached to her too and then you took him from us, you took him for her. This was masterfully done, heartbreaking and goosebumps inducing. 👏🏽👌🏽🤗♥️
Wow, this is incredible!
This is a beautiful poem and your vocabulary is quite impressive!
It's so a beautiful dark poem The dark imagery and somber tone create a captivating depth
This is a tragically fascinating poem… & subtitle 🥹.
This was wonderful!
I like idea of these different sounds coming back to him. It's like tormenting patience on her part.
Superb writing
So beautifully written! Loved it.
A pool of sadness but it shows your real talent of writing!
I love seeing under-used words in writing. Well done!
Wow I loved it!
Your talent amazes me, you have every range possible and each one of them brilliantly written.
This is Amazing. Truly amazing work.
Love this one! The word choice is excellent and you expertly describe that anguish!
Your ability to describe emotions is perfect. You captured the fear of abandonment so well here.
'A scream of anguish left my throat..' You delve deep, with spark and creative genius. Loved it!
Damn you are so good with words and emotions. A real talent
Just EXCELLENT!! Just WOW! Wonderful piece.
Wow!
If I could heart this a second time I would! It's just as good the second time around, I love everything from the flow of the piece to your vocabulary choices! I forgot how many new words there were to discover in this tragedy you've told! Still such a beautifully melancholic piece to behold and I still love it! Great work Dharrsheena!
I applaud you for this masterpiece.
What a magnificent cry! Bravo.