Beneath
Moment of Silence Challenge; acrostic
Something stirs beneath the surface
Inside labyrinthine walls built thick with forgotten scars,
Left rotten and decayed in subtle putrefaction,
Every bit gnawing and scratching at its unwitting prison.
Not unlike the river, it flows and grows and bides its time to break the dam
Cutting and grinding at the stone, ravenous, unseen, unheard,
Evermore hidden beneath its placid smiling shell yearning only to break free.
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"Do It Again" the track that would ultimately open the Beach Boys final album on Capitol Records which was released on February 10th 1969 had originally been released as a single in August of 1968. The track was the first of many post-Pet Sounds era throwbacks to the early Beach Boys sound which would become continually more cliched and eventually lead the Beach Boys to the level of self-parody they would eventually succumb to in the 1980s while their closest contemporaries The Beatles nearing the end of their run in 1969 would go on to be viewed as the most influential band of all time. However, the song itself is not bad on its surface, and it opens with a futuristic sounding (for 1969) drumbeat captured by then-Beach Boys engineer Stephen Desper using tape delays on the drums performed by Dennis Wilson and John Guerin. The song has been re-recorded numerous times over the years on various Beach Boys-related projects most notably the 2011 re-recording at Capitol studios featuring the five surviving Beach Boys at the time backed instrumentally by various members of both the Brian Wilson Band and Mike Loves touring "Beach Boys" to promote the then upcoming Beach Boys 50th Anniversary reunion tour in 2012. The hammering and power drill sound at the end of the song was an excerpt from a track called "Workshop" that was to be a part of the uncompleted "SMiLE" album.
By Sean Callaghan7 days ago in Beat
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built thick with forgotten scars - I lingered on this line 😁
A haunting depiction of inner turmoil, where buried pain silently festers, growing in strength, waiting to shatter its restrained facade.
Beautiful! This one reeks of death and rot, blending together with the s i l e n c e acrostic. You have truly painted an artistic and vivid picture with this one. [5/5] Thank you, again, so much for entering! I hope to see your work in future challenges!
Congratulations on top story! Beautifully written!
This is a lovely poem, reminiscent of the poems of old. Congratulations on the Top Story!
Beautiful piece. Congrats on the TS.
Great poem!
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This one filled me with lovely melancholy! (a word I never spell right on the first tryXD) Congrats on your Top Story, Ian! "Inside labyrinthine walls built thick with forgotten scars," This was my favourite line! Put such a sad and beautiful image in my mind
amazing, congrats on the TS
Once I'd seen the picture, I couldn't divorce the words from it. Very good.
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Congratulations on your Top Story!
This was tense. You brought thst idea of something waiting for its moment to pounce, launch, expunge really well.
Terrifyingly relatable!!! Very well done Ian! 🤍
Nice!!! Killer lines throughout but the ending sealed the deal for me. Great job!!!
THIS IS SO GOOD, IAN!! The diction, flow, and symbolism are all excellent. It's a good day when I see you on the front page. (:
This was excellent from the first line to the last! Fantastic entry, Ian :)
heck ya! glad this ended up here. congrats!
excellent entry sir.