I start to notice:
Dead leaves, colder breeze,
And my knees sometimes give in
To the weariness, built up by
The miles and months elapsed.
The state of tender lassitude
Descends; it veils my sight.
And I—I start to see—
Through the thick tendrils of my lashes—
I see the rainbow disks conceived by
the refracted sun rays.
And I can swear, I start to see
The multitude, the mesh of rails
My train could take, could've taken, and will take...
But, for God's sake, just for a moment, let me rest.
Please share the weight of making choices
With thy friend. Relieve the burden off my chest,
Release the free will we've once had.
Autumnal hymn, it goes like this:
The roads we travel, they unwind
In one's mind's eye,
Maybe in yours, maybe in mine.
The sun will set, the night will come,
The travellers, exhausted, halt
Under a tree that shed its leaves.
The winds are howling
The very hymn we're humming too.
The stars are shimmering above,
Reflecting in your eyes.
And for today, it is enough.
And if tomorrow winter comes and claims
Its rights, we'll be prepared,
We'll be alright.
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I waited way too long to read this and for that, I apologize. This is excellent. I really can't find an area that I like less than the rest. However, I particularly enjoyed this collection of lines: "And I can swear, I start to see The multitude, the mesh of rails My train could take, could've taken, and will take... But, for God's sake, just for a moment, let me rest." And of course, the way you ended this piece is so satisfying with the rhyme and meter that comes before. I just love it. A perfect seasonal-transition poem, Andrei. Very well done. I feel it should win something.
Oh I loved this!! If I wasn't ready to embrace the coming season, this would have pushed me into it for sure!! Congrats on Top Story, Andrei!!
Beautiful Poem, congratulations on Top Story xx
Really love the beginning lines! Excellent piece
perfect for autumn's approach. 👏
Great piece
This is such a lovely piece 🥹
Perfect for the season!
Beautiful poetry, Andrei, from start to finish. Congratulations on your top story!
I love this piece. It gives me a sense of rushing life's seasons to beat Mother Nature's. Congrats on Top Story!
💜🍁🌰🍁🍂🌰💜 Love the fusion of beauty & truth! 💜🍁🌰🍁🍂🌰💜
What a surrender to the seasons. I feel this is something I need currently.
Ah the old change in the air poem. 😄 I feel it too. We are to have a blood moon tonight and I’m tempted to wake up to see it even if I am often a poor sleeper. May I ask did you pump this beautiful baby out stream of consciousness, or do you plan the poem?
Really loved the opening to this awesome poem. It felt honest and pure. Nice work! Andrei!
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