A Total Eclipse of the Shopping Cart
"So what the hell is it then?"
Eggs? No, no, no, not the right shape.
Clementines? Closer, but the colour is way off.
Large tortillas? Better, but think much bigger than that.
Io? No, too big. That's Jupiter's.
Pluto? Surprisingly, that's a third too small.
So what is it then? Look up, really look, what do you see when the light is snuffed out? What's round and nearby and hangs in the night sky?
Eco lightbulbs? No! It's the bloody moon! The sun is eclipsed by the moon!
About the Creator
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I’m a writer, a storyteller, a lunatic. I imagine in a parallel universe I might be a caricaturist or a botanist or somewhere asleep on the moon — but here, I am a writer, turning moments into multiverses and making homes out of them.
Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
Standing While Falling
Quotation from Friedrich Nietzsche "He who wrestles long with monsters should beware lest he himself become a monster. And if you gaze long into an abyss, the abyss also gazes into you. Man is not destroyed by suffering, but by the meaning he makes of it."
By LUCCIAN LAYTH4 days ago in Critique
Comments (4)
I love the creativity in this!!
Entertaining nature poem and loved it!!!❤️❤️💕
I loved this! It was so much fun to read!
LOL very clever, em!