A Raindrop on Repeat
A Stream Of Consciousness Poem
Satin sheets cling to my sweaty skin. They would tell a tale of sin, but today it’s no such thing. My bed an empty vessel of vast memories of the past. I reach out to empty space, it’s nice but also sad. Melancholy manic thoughts wash over me, after scenes of gratuitousness play out. Looking at past failures and success I wonder what life is all about. My thoughts so loud they echo in this vast empty house. I long to hold one close, yet push away like a body builder lifting plates. I long and crave to have, yet spend and give my money away on frivolous amenities and vices each day. Then, I look and ask why neither love nor money choose to stay. I’ve had both and gave them all away.
Now at night I sit and pray. I’ve been in this cycle for longer than I can say. A raindrop on repeat, tasting clouds so sweet, then I fall back down upon dirty concrete. Fade and evaporate away, only to come back another day. Like torn satin sheets fingernails digging too deep, I’m left frayed. The scars of lovers past won’t go away, and like a horror book I’m too afraid to turn the page, and when I try I only lose my place, and start back at the beginning of the race.
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Comments (15)
Nice but that title is spectacular!! Like the words are contained in this bubble of emotions in the title..very nice!
WOW. Congratulations on your TS.
Congratulations on top story.
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
This gave me a feeling of our heart's frailty, our whims just temporary pacifiers to get through time when it's too much to bare.
This just feels like you're very very stuck.
So much power in every letter and every word. So many emotions but you were able to hold them under your control, so that you can weave them into sentences that would allow your audience to get a better glimpse of what it’s like to be you. It came across with ease, but we can feel your pain and read the lines as if those words were ours. Well done.
Wow. Just wow. This is incredible.
Back to say congratulations on the Top Story achievement! It’s so well-deserved!
This poem beautifully captures the cycle of longing and loss, intertwining the fragility of emotions with the relentless passage of time. The imagery of raindrops and torn satin sheets poignantly echoes the struggle between desire and disillusionment.
This is beautifully written. Congrats on the TS.
Deep and filled with heart.Congrats
Bravo, very well done. Like a scene from my own life
You've captured the emotion embodied in being on the cusp or the edge of a precipice heading toward something you can't stop or something you don't completely understand and can't stop. Your piece was a very emotional and somewhat dark read, but also very relatable. Very nicely done.
This was so poignant, emotional and relatable. Loved your take on the challenge!