Author's Note
I wrote this poem in December, about a month after my husband passed away, just after I had scattered his ashes into the ocean east of our home.
I initially sent it to Rattle, but three months later, they declined it. I had almost forgotten about it, but now I want to share it with the world.
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A Grey Mourning
The morning’s foggy haze so grey
I hear the scream of hungry hawks
Raindrops gather on opaque hay
The morningś foggy haze so grey
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Remembering that you’re away
Stolen by blackness - no one talks
The morning’s foggy haze so grey
I hear the scream of hungry hawks.
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Henrik Hageland
A poet, a writer of feelings and hope. A Dane and inhibitant of the Earth thinking about what is to come.
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Comments (11)
I feel honored that you sent me this long ago and to be able to read it. Rattle really has bad taste in poets. They denied me a few times. This is wonderful, my dear friend! <3
Aww, Henrik, a poignant sad poem for your love who is gone.
This is a beautiful poem, sad and beautiful.
Your emotions shine through. Nicely penned sorry it was rejected.
I'm so sorry they rejected your poem. It was so poignant and emotional. I loved it!
I'm so sorry they rejected your poem. It was so poignant and emotional. I loved it!
Written with your heart, Henrik. Rattle is very tough, I have submitted over 10 poems to them, and nothing. At least they reply and let you know.
Gorgeous work! Sorry again 4 your loss!
Can totally feel your grief. Heartbreaking. It’s a beautiful photo too.
This poem is so heartfelt and touching. The repetition of the haze so grey fills the reader with a deep sense of feeling lost in the grief. The last line "I hear the scream of hungry hawks" give the sense that one feels as if they might be consumed and is such a powerful expression of the poets heartbreak. I felt this poem deeply and am so glad you shared it here with the world. My heart hopes that you will know sunshine again through all of that foggy haze. Deepest and most sincere condolences.
Sad words, beautifully expressed