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I heard seagulls calling
And dreamt of the sea
But it was your nostrils
Whistling
Lying next to me
So far from the sea.
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Comments (7)
Love it !!!!
Better to inspire sweet dreams than to keep you awake. Comforting reassurances to hear the breathing of your beloved.
Ha! That was a twist! I can put up with the irritating noises, but it's even worse when you can hear someone sleeping soundly and you're wide awake! Great stuff Rachel.
This is both funny and sad, well labeled! If Vocal ever does a Shockwave poem challenge, have this at the ready!
This is a poetic twist for the ages, Rachel. Laugh out loud funny! If I had a nickel for every time my long suffering wife woke me up to stop aforementioned whistling I’d have retired long ago!
I’m sure my wife would feel this to her soul. Great job!
I was so ready for this to be emotionally deep and instead it left me laughing. This was amazing!! Wonderful writing!