Dying Trap
For the Spooky Micro-fiction Challenge
There was only one rule: don’t open the door.
With eyes as bright as the moon, lips as pure as the day she lost her virginity, she wish she could see him again tonight in her dreams, she had questions. Tonight at her mothers grave she spoke to the stars.
Grant me my mother from the grave
Let me hear her voice
See her frame even if she’s just bones
The next day, she went to school. Hands becoming shaky as she walked up the stairs, her heart beat bah dum, beating through the halls up the steps. She had a sense of anxiety just a moment before turning the corner, to the room where she was to take her test.
A light bulb blew out.
With caffeine in her system, she thought she would be ready but as her hand started to write without her meaning to, she knew she might fail and this was something that she was not prepared to do, but she was prepared to die.
Back at home, there was blood splatter on her door, she opened it and ran inside, slamming it shut. She wondered how he could’ve followed her through the great big hole, in the cave of her mind, her dreams eye.
*knock knock*
On the beach she was alone, running barefoot, tickling grit the sand pushed through her toes. She wondered why she was running, and where the wind had gone. To her surprise, there was a man waiting for her. He laid her on the sand and took her virginity, ‘your blood will be a sign to you. If you don’t accept my proposal by the time you are awake, I will pay you a visit and your life will end.’
About the Creator
Caitlin Charlton
poetry too close to home
🪄~unique fictional stories 💎 you’ve never known 🪄
📖~ let me read your work, say hi to me, I will leave comments longer than the road, please do return ~ 🙏🏽
📸 YouTube natures finest moments 🎥
~ married👰💍 ~
Reader insights
Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
Top insights
Excellent storytelling
Original narrative & well developed characters
Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab
Keep reading
More stories from Caitlin Charlton and writers in Horror and other communities.
How Bludworth Survived Death?
In Final Destination films, Bludworth (played by Tony Todd) was known to be the "Grim Reaper" and the Coroner of the film series. Bludworth has been an expert on Death giving advice on how to escape from Death that was until the Final Destination: Bloodlines, which would be Todd's final performance, Todd's character William John Bludworth (his full name) actually escaped Death decades ago at the Sky View where he was supposed to die along with his mother who was the singer of the band at the Skyview. During the until Iris who was in her 20s (played by Brec Bassinger) who had a Premonition that everyone is going to die on the Skyview, she stops the performance just to saving everyones lives including Bludworth. In the Final Destination: Bloodlines, Iris (played by Gabrielle Rose) now at old age, dying of cancer in hiding away from had two grown children who have their own children. One of their children, Stefani (played by Kaitlyn Santa Juana) had the same premonition met with Iris. Iris was living in a gated solitary home away from the outside world. Iris gives Stefani a book that shows who will die next and information on what happened after the SkyView to save their family before accepting Death's fate. After her death, Iris's son (played by Alex Zahara) dies next and Stefani's cousin (played by Anna Lore) which made Stefani get depth with Grandma Iris's book.
By Gladys W. Muturi2 days ago in Horror
Let's Don't Do This
"I just can't do this anymore..." "Do what?" What can't you do? Put gas in your own car? I swear to God you make me take care of everything, don't you? You know I'm on my way to work right now but that never stops you from bothering me, does it?"
By Shirley Belk6 days ago in Fiction
Comments (13)
A possession by her own mother's ghost perhaps?? Definitely creepy and an enticing read!
well written
Wow. Very compelling, even in the violence that no one wants in reality.
Outstanding but more creepy Awesome writing 👍
Definitely creepy.
Emotion, pain, anger, and an intense feeling accompany your imaginary story. The idea of searching for the protective mother is wonderful. "What are you drinking that you don't share with us?" I would say here. Perfect!
This is really dark. Excellent writing! You definitely create tension and fear, somehow the line about wondering why she was running and where the wind had gone was really compelling. Captures the confused powerlessness of a nightmare.
I will think about this for a long while—a fabulous psychological thriller.
Omggg this was sooooo creeeppppyyyyy! I loved it!
This was a lot in a little. Excellent work! Dream killers, great thrillers. Very well done.
This is amazing, Caitlin. As surreal as a dream and as terrifying as waking up to a nightmare. You leave just enough unspoken to scare the hell out of us! I hope you continue to enter other challenges!
Oh, this is chilling. Lucid dreams are waking nightmares. Wonder how it all will end.
This kind of reminds me of 'Carrie' in a way. Great thriller.