My eyes are drawn to the octogenarian sitting alone upon a bench in silence, while the world moves around him. There is a serenity emanating from within, surrounding him in a halo. I am mesmerized but have no idea why.
People hustle in every direction on the platform, hopping off trains as they arrive. I watch as individuals rush into loved ones arms while others with tear-stained cheeks, stare at nothing. Feeling like a child dropped off at summer camp, I stand lost. To say I feel a willing participant is like saying I am the frightened bull tossed into an arena full of screaming voices, desperately wanting to leave, yet knowing this is where I need to be.
My feet move, until I find myself by the old man. Who smiles and pats the seat next to him.
“Your first time?” He asks.
I nod. “Is it always this crowded?”
“No, there are times when it’s peaceful. Who are you here to see?”
I find myself saying. “My son. He is returning home from overseas.”
Staring into my eyes he glances at the crushed envelope gripped with in my fingers. Placing an elderly hand upon my shoulder. “Are you proud of him?”
The question shocks me. Before I can answer, his face lights up, a smile of pure joy creases his wrinkled face, and he looks young once more. I follow his gaze. Stepping off the train is a handsome young man in his prime. Dressed in military garb of yester year.
In a motion, spry for his age he runs and embraces the young soldier. My breathing becomes sporadic, my lip quivers with emotion upon this vision of pure love. My eyes refuse to give them privacy, so drawn am I to this display of open affection. Together they approach me with smiles like that of a child on his birthday.
“This is my son, Richard.”
I stand, shake his hand. “Thank you for your service. I’m waiting for my son, David. He is returning from his final tour in Iraq.”
Richards puzzled face turns into an understanding look, as he replies. “He will be anxious to see you.”
With that they turn and walk away, arms around each other, like a proud father and son should.
Perhaps it was a trick of the shadows or the way the light glared from the setting sun. Yet with each step they took, the young man began fading away. Until the old man stood alone. From his posture I sensed his anguish, felt his despair. Turning towards me, he nods, not in farewell but in a way that say’s, until next time.
I knew he meant we would meet again on this platform. How many years has he been returning?
Glancing upon the letter addressed to me. ‘Care of the department of defense.’
In a fog I hear my son‘s voice, and suddenly I understand. Instantly my soul bursts with love and overwhelming sorrow.
Yes, I am proud of him.
About the Creator
JBaz
I have enjoyed writing for most of my life, never professionally.
I wish to now share my stories with others, lets see where it goes.
Born and raised on the Canadian Prairies, I currently reside on the West Coast. I call both places home.
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Comments (32)
Excellent work Jason! So heartfelt!
I loved the emotional layers woven into the narrative — it really stayed with me. Fantastic work!
This piece beautifully captures love and loss.
Simply amazing. Loved this story so much! Congrats on the Leaderboard placing!
So sad and a story of so many parents. We need to change the rhetoric on the war stories. Pointless sadness, Congrats on a great story and L/B placing.
Fk excellent work. If this doesn’t do well I’m burning this place down. Literal goosebumps.
Emotional!!! Congrats on Top Story & the Leaderboard win!!!❤️❤️💕
Yaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!! Jason!! Congrats on first for most discussed story this week!!! 🎉
Wooohooooo congratulations on your Leaderboard placement! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Congratulations on first place! I really enjoyed this story, it went straight to the heart.
I really felt like this was a real story you’d read on the news. Excellent
What an awesome place that would be to visit on occasion. Very surreal and full of both joy and heartbreak. Congrats on such a fine TS, J.
Woohoo!! Back to say congrats on Top Story, Jason!!
can anyone read my stories give me feedback?
Lovely, moving story. Congratulations!
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Well written, congrats 👏
Oh, so beautiful and heart wrenching! What an excellent story, JBaz! Congratulations on Top Story! It is very well deserved!
Bittersweet but cathartic. Loved the circle of the narrative. Excellent job! Congratulations on the top story!
Wow Jbaz! There are so many layers to this story! L What an awful place purgatory must be to force us to wait like that 👀 A fantastic 10/10 story! Going to log in on my computer so I can give an outstanding Don’t know why they don’t let us do that one the app 🤔
What a memorable, outstanding, and heartfelt story. I truly loved this piece so much. Congratulations, too, a much deserved Top Story.
I wish this railway station existed. Lovely story. Beautifully mournful.
I loved every word of it. Superb...
Oh my. That was both heartwrenching and heartwarming. Excellent work, my friend.
And now I feel myself melting away as surely as Richard did & David will. And at once our hearts shall be broken & full.