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The First Hunt

For the Snow Micro Challenge

By Jessica PhoenixPublished 2 years ago Updated about a year ago 1 min read
Top Story - February 2024
The First Hunt
Photo by Jonatan Pie on Unsplash

Two small ears pricked up from under layers of snow.

Alright, I can do this, Thought the young Arctic fox. It was her first winter, and this was her first hunt.

In front of her, there sat a plump, white hare, chewing on grass from a small patch of green.

She took a step closer.

The hare's ears shot up first, followed by his head, on high alert.

Pounce! Shouted a voice in her head, pounce now!

Well, that was the wrong decision.

The second her paws left the snow as she leaped, the hare darted away, quick as a bullet from a hunter's gun.

Oh, Frostbite and icicles! She huffed. Now what am I supposed to eat?

Don't be discouraged if the prey gets away, said her mother's voice in her head, be persistent, or you'll never catch anything.

As much as she didn't want to admit it, her mother was right. She had to be persistent, or she was destined to starve.

So, taking the advice, she got up and searched for more prey, and it wasn't long before she found a harvest mouse sitting, cleaning its whiskers, in a clearing.

Alone.

Vulnerable.

Her lips spread in a toothy approximation of a smile. She lowered her head, as her mother had once taught her, and waited for just the right moment to pounce.

You won't get away this time, she thought.

Still he sat, having no clue he was being stalked.

She waited a bit longer...

...then pounced.

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**Want to know what happened to the harvest mouse in the events leading up to his encounter with the fox? Read my story, "The First Forage" to find out!

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About the Creator

Jessica Phoenix

"To write well, express yourself like the common people, but think like a wise man." -Aristotle

I'm working on a book that I hope to publish sometime soon- Wish me luck!

I enjoy drawing, reading about Autism, and researching about dogs!

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  • Susan Fourtané 10 months ago

    Ohhh no! The poor little mouse! I came here after reading the mouse’s point of view. 🐭

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  • Well written… cute voice for the Arctic Fox… & pic!

  • Test2 years ago

    Phenomenal work! Keep the excellence going—congrats!

  • Karthikeyan A S2 years ago

    Great work!!!

  • Unknown Person2 years ago

    just wow!

  • Waheed Mahar2 years ago

    Wao kiaa bat ha

  • Waheed Mahar2 years ago

    Looking out of words

  • Waheed Mahar2 years ago

    Adorable 😍😍😻

  • Kodah2 years ago

    Aww this was sweet! Loved your story!💖

  • Sathishkumar S2 years ago

    nice

  • Well written! Congrats on top story!

  • JBaz2 years ago

    Well done, this is a delightful read, you draw the reader in with the cute photo then deliver a well told story. I am glad I do not know the full outcome, little harvest mouse is just have a nice day in the sun, right?

  • Test2 years ago

    I loved this Jessica, it was really well thought out and so well written! Such a beautiful narrative!! But I should be honest... you had me sucked in from the picture alone, Foxes are my favourite!! 💚 Great story and congrats on Top Story!

  • Test2 years ago

    Fascinating story Keep up the fantastic work—congratulations!

  • Ace Melee2 years ago

    The fox in the photo is so cute! Very cute story!

  • Kevin Arasa2 years ago

    Nice story

  • Kendall Defoe 2 years ago

    And then...?! 🥴 Excellent Story for the Top! 🏅

  • PK Colleran2 years ago

    Fun story. Great photo. Congratulations on Top Story.💙

  • Gabriel Huizenga2 years ago

    Reminds me of the Warrior cats books I read as a kid- awesome, engaging style!

  • Andrea Corwin 2 years ago

    Great job! Congrats on T.S. Loved the descriptions and the photo.

  • The story is adorable 🥰

  • What a cute little story about a fox's first hunt! She's such a quick learner and will hopefully get bigger game in the future. Congrats on the Top Story.

  • Test2 years ago

    Good job.

  • Alyssa Musso2 years ago

    This is such a cute story! The little fox learns so quickly. It's a great micro. Congrats on the Top Story!

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