The Family At Number 47
Fan Fiction on Perfection
Perfection is an illusion. --Michelle LiewΒ
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Marigold Lane was quiet--peaceful, picturesque. A place where parents wanted their children to take root. Grow up.
Where decent family values were held dear.Β
The Blackstones ---unflappable, champions of the status quo---arrived to complete this idyllic suburban scene. No one knew when they got to Marigold--they simply appeared, as if their house had grown them.Β
Not a sound came from the house. No creaks, no odd moans. But it was as if it had grown the Blackstones. They didn't blink as often as the rest of us. Unassuming and polished as they were, they were---too perfect. Too still. Too calm.Β
A little too stoic---for me.Β
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Our white-picket-fence-neighbors began to engage---but always held enough back. Baked goods, in neat packaging, left quietly on our patio. Greetings, in well-rounded cursive. Prettily wrapped presents on birthdays, never late, never early, always remembered. Family meals, seen through the curtain, played like well-synchronized scenes from Family Ties.Β
I chalked it up to envy. They had what everyone in the neighbourhood wanted---an idyllic home, thatΒ charming white fence, a car.Β
Money.Β
But something felt--off. Their children looked the same the next year. And the year after next. Their dog? Too quiet. Mum was too slim. As if she had never seen a plate. Dad always smiled. Always. Never in a foul mood.Β
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We got THE invite for dinner. And we walked over. Their table was as they were---well-laid. Plates well aligned, forks and spoons sitting like quiet Terra Cotta warriors.Β
Dinner was a well-played march past, with Dad always smiling. He passed the bread around like a conductor disciplining his choir. Every gesture at the table was---terrifyingly synchronized. "Children make mistakes," Mr. Blackstone said in a melodious tenor. "Mistakes are lessons," he said, as if reading from a music score.Β
All of us spoke in well-cadenced, gentle tones, our responses too well-timed. Too precise. Their laughter felt rehearsed, expressions from actors who didn't sync with their scenes.Β
And then the questions came, oddly personal queries for a neighbourly relationship.
"Do you think family is sacred?"
"Are you comfortable with someone watching you?"
Then, the toast, at just the right moment. "To unity, obedience, and harmony."
A glass shattered, its tiny fragments showing Mr Blackstone's smiling reflection.
In different places, all over the floor.Β
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But not for long, courtesy of Mrs. Blackstone's helper, dressed in neatly pressed servant's attire. Everyone finished the meal in unsettled silence.Β
Mrs. Blackstone and her helper strode into the dining room in unison, carrying a cake, already sliced in perfect pieces.Β
My eyes fell on a photo on the wall. Everyone was there---including myself.Β
I stared at the dessert plate in front of me. I smiled, like everyone else. Lifted my fork, like everyone else. Chewed on the cake, like Mrs Blackstone. And smiled, like dad.Β
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This story is entirely original. AI tags are coincidental.
About the Creator
Michelle Liew Tsui-Lin
Hi, i am an English Language teacher cum freelance writer with a taste for pets, prose and poetry. When I'm not writing my heart out, I'm playing with my three dogs, Zorra, Cloudy and Snowball.


Comments (26)
"Great read!"
Wow, this is so intriguing! The unsettling perfection of the Blackstone family is beautifully written, and the eerie atmosphere of Marigold Lane really draws you in. I love how youβve crafted the sense of unease with such subtletyβevery little detail, from the synchronized dinner to the mysterious smile, adds to the growing tension. The ending was chilling! Canβt wait to read more.
Congratulations on the Top Story! π
Wow! π Well written, Congrats
great!
Wow, this was perfectly unsettling, Mishelle. Great rendering of mystery and tension and totally deserving of TS!
What an illusion it is...very well done! Congrats on your top story
Really enjoyed reading. The kind of story, which engrosses a reader.
My first visit to your creative site. Loved this story!
π Congrats on getting Top Story! π So well deserved β Iβm super proud of you! ππ I seriously canβt wait to read the next oneβ¦ I know itβs gonna be just as amazing! βοΈπ₯ Keep shining! π«
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! ππππππ
Well done on your top story! Well deserved π
Very well written, congrats π
Congrats on the TS
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Congratulations on your top story.
Amazing one !! I've ever ever read. Loved this twist.
Oh and also, congrats on the top story! This is well deserved of it!!!! <3
AAAH Brilliant! Loved it! The twist was excellent!
This gave me Stepford Wives meets Black Mirror vibesβand I devoured every eerie bite of it! Iβll never look at a slice of cake the same way again.
I love the ending! The photo on the wall! Beautifully written Michelle.
Nice twist. π
I think they were the Stepford family. Creepy and a bit like the robots on the Stepford wives but it was an entire family. Well Done!!!
Oh shit, that was creeeeepy! Excellent twist at the end!