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The Brush Off

A Story Every Day in 2024 August 12th 225/366

By Rachel DeemingPublished about a year ago 2 min read
The Brush Off
Photo by Caroline Hernandez on Unsplash

When Marcel asked Paula "Let's eat together one night," she'd expected a restaurant and not his maisonette.

They'd been on a few drinks' "dates" prior although he had never kissed her, which she found unusual for a French man, though he seemed benign.

He was always littering her with compliments. He would gaze at her, across the table and she would say, "What?" in her best beguiling way. He would pretend he was awakening from a reverie, and in his perfect English tempered by his broad French accent, he'd say, "It is your skin. It is iridescent. It captivates me," or "It is your hair. Lustrous and that copper, like the richest polished walnut."

She'd never felt so attractive. British men never talked like this. She'd had comments made about her breasts once or twice and a "Phwoah!" once in the street but nothing so involved. This was a revelation!

She felt like tonight things could get more serious. She'd dressed carefully, paid scrupulous attention to her personal hygiene and grooming and was ready for anything!

When Marcel took her to his maisonette, she was disappointed. Marcel, however, was fizzing, his mood heightened and his movements belied an excitement that he was barely able to contain.

His was a dingy place and Marcel was not the tidiest of people. Clothes everywhere. Plants. Empty cigarette packets strewn. Books on every subject.

And stacks of things with corners leaning against walls under blankets. Shelves waiting to be erected?

When he served her pâté on baguette, she wondered if her effort had been misplaced.

"Paula, I 'ave a proposal," Marcel drawled.

Paula's heart leapt. Could she marry a man she'd never kissed? Yes, she thought she could!

"Take off your clothes."

Was that the proposal? Oh well! These Frenchies! They were a heady bunch and with a frisson of expectation, she did as Marcel asked. He disappeared and naked, she tried to arrange herself seductively on the couch while he was gone.

When he returned, still fully clothed with nothing more huge than a palette, she felt flushed with foolishness from her head to her toes.

Marcel never got to use his brush: Paula gave him the brush off.

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366 words

With all this Parisian attention as a result of the Olympics, I thought I would indulge in a little Frenchness myself.

Thanks for stopping by! If you do read this, please leave a comment as I love to interact with my readers.

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  • C. Rommial Butlerabout a year ago

    Well-wrought and highly amusing!

  • Caroline Cravenabout a year ago

    Haha!!! Oo-la-la! What a date!! I bet she sticks to British “phwoar” men after that! Love this!

  • Hilarious!😆… fabulous finale: “ Marcel never got to use his brush: Paula gave him the brush off.”💖

  • ReadShakurrabout a year ago

    Wow

  • Hahahahahahahahahaha soooo embarrassing!! 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣

  • John Coxabout a year ago

    Laughed out loud at your finale, Rachel. I saw the brush and palette coming, but not the ‘brush off.’ Hilarious twist!

  • L.C. Schäferabout a year ago

    Brilliant! 🤣I did one about a French man too!

  • D.K. Shepardabout a year ago

    You and L.C. both delivered some French micros today! At first I thought they might be connected! Loved that final sentence!

  • Melissa Ingoldsbyabout a year ago

    lol 😂 I enjoyed this

  • Esala Gunathilakeabout a year ago

    Well said. Thanks for sharing.

  • Lana V Lynxabout a year ago

    Oh, what a disappointment for Paula. Deep down, though, she probably knew he was admiring her for her unusual beauty as the subject for his painting. So we’ll-written, Rachel!

  • Cindy Calderabout a year ago

    Funny story. Assumption is the MF to reality.

  • Gerard DiLeoabout a year ago

    Even with palettes, size matters?

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