Planning Sucks
When Valentine's date night doesn't go quite as planned
"Darling, I am starving," said Lily.
Vincent smiled thoughtfully as he parked their car. He then leaned back in his seat and stared into Lily's eyes. "Hmm... where would you like to go, honey? There are plenty of options to choose from."
Lily shrugged. "Yeah, but no good options."
"That's true," Vincent admitted, "but there's always Mickey's."
Lily looked at her partner disgustedly. "No, I've had too much of that, lately. You know, I could go for Wendy's."
"No," sighed Vincent, "Wendy's always upsets my stomach. Remember last time?"
"Oh, yeah, that's right," nodded Lily, "that was not pretty. Hey! It's late enough, Denny's would be real quick! That would give us plenty of time to continue this date at home."
She brushed her index finger against his collar bone and bit her lip.
Vincent immediately shook his head, gritting his teeth. "No, too bland."
Lily dropped her shoulders impatiently. "Come on, babe! We need to eat something! I could actually go for Timmy's at this point."
Vincent looked confused. "Is he even still alive?"
Suddenly, there was a knock on the car window. There was a police officer on the other side. Vincent rolled the window down.
"Excuse me sir, you can't park here. This is a fire lane."
Vincent looked to Lily. She shrugged.
"Better than nothing," she said approvingly.
The couple looked back to the officer. Their eyes suddenly glowed bright red and they smiled wide fanged smiles.
"Happy Valentine's day, my love. Take out it is."
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Let's Don't Do This
"I just can't do this anymore..." "Do what?" What can't you do? Put gas in your own car? I swear to God you make me take care of everything, don't you? You know I'm on my way to work right now but that never stops you from bothering me, does it?"
By Shirley Belk6 days ago in Fiction
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A story with teeth, love it
Hahaha, I suspected by the time I read Timmy's this wasn't the regular type of date, love it, Ian.
Nice little slice of micro fun. As soon as they said Mickies I knew they weren't talking fast food and was waiting for the twist. It was delivered and I was delighted. Good one Ian.
Man I love this lol