her secret she whispered
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PLEASE LISTEN TO THE MUSIC WHILE YOU READ!! (I've used this sound before but I love it too much!! :)"
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I picked her for a reason. She resembled me, with sapphire blue eyes mirroring my own and skin as delicate and pale as a daisy.
"I want this one, father!" I grab her without waiting for a yes or no.
She became my best friend. At that time at least.
I would spend the entire day with her, playing until our legs grew weary and the sun drifted into the ocean.
She was a gorgeous doll. Everything about her was so mesmerizing, and she came dressed in a style I would've picked too.
She was beautiful.
Until one day I popped her leg off on accident. She wasn't particularly happy about that.
She whispered to me. "You hurt me..." I apologised to her.
I don't know if that was the moment when everything began to change.
But things started getting peculiar....
As soon as it hit midnight, she would whisper to me. But they weren't just whispers, they were secrets.
Secrets she threatened me not to repeat.
The closest I've been to revealing one of her secrets, was when my father asked me..."Why is your doll near your ear?"...
"She's telling me about how she died, father! She-"
-She flung out of my hand....
That night, she was beyond furious that I had nearly told my father her secret. She called me a horrible friend, and said I wasn't trustworthy with secrets. That hurt. It stung more than I expected.
I remember when she and I would run through fields of lilac blues and daisies, their soft petals matching the hue of our skin. A duck trotted over to the nearby tree adjacent to us.
"Look ####!" I pointed.
#### whispered to me... "Kill it..."
Jesus, I thought.
That same night when it hit was midnight. #### wasn't pleased again. ####yelled at me for not killing that duck.
"How do I fix this; how can I restore your happiness?"- I listen.
"K-k..."
"What did you say?"- I put #### towards my ear.
"Kill your dad."
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I burned the house down a few hours after killing him. I was distressed. As I watched the fire, I could see something bigger than the flame. It was a soul. Freeing itself.
What was that? It didn't look like my dad or anyone I knew. It was smiling at me however...
####... Where is ####... my doll ####.
I panicked and forgot about her and left her inside the house.
I could see her eyes in the flame, dark and wild, her expression was soft, as if she was finally watching the world unfold from a dream she was no longer trapped in.
"You freed me." She whispered to me one last time. I could only nod in aghast.
I realised, it wasn't a doll anymore, not really.
But I knew this already...
####'s secret was that she was once a little girl who jumped out of a window holding her favourite doll.
I had to sacrifice someone to save her...To free her from the doll.
Her secret was that she neglected her death, and didn't choose to cross over, so instead inhabited her doll and dwelled in past regrets.
Her secret was her name... her name was... I can't say.
Now you know both her secret and mine, do not tell or I shall sacrifice you.
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Thank you for reading my short microfiction! :)💖💖💖
The doll isn't just a toy, it is a vessel for a trapped soul, one that has suffered a tragic death and refuses to move on. Living in past regrets. The protagonist then carries on that past regret she took from the doll, initially explaining why the doll became 'free' and the ending of ' do not tell or I shall sacrifice you'. The doll isn't just an object, but a manifestation of the protagonist's internal struggle and guilt and the idea that some secrets, once learned, cannot be unlearned without dire consequences. You never know the doll's name, because the protagonist has learnt from past consequences of revealing secrets.
About the Creator
Kodah
- Storyteller, Love/Romance, Dark, Surrealism, Psychological, Nature, Mythical, Whimsical
~𝓢𝓽𝓸𝓻𝓲𝓮𝓼 𝓬𝓪𝓷 𝓫𝓮 𝓪 𝓵𝓲𝓽𝓽𝓵𝓮 𝓭𝓮𝓮𝓹~
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Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
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Compelling and original writing
Creative use of language & vocab




Comments (21)
very nice to read
Wow, I missed this, sorry!The music and the beginning really set it up. It is sooooo good! Congratulations on TS!! 🎉🥳
Expertly written. Congratulations on your top story!
Love the scary stuff! Keep it coming lol
Your microfiction is haunting and a tale of eerie and dark secrets.
Congrats on Top Story! 🎉, Well deserved and super proud!!!
Creepy story indeed. I loved it!!! Great TS, Kodah!
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Well written, congrats 🙏
Boom! Top story. Well done Kodah!
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I'm so relieved that she didn't kill the duck. As for her father, oh well, shit happens, lol. Dolls are always so creepy to me. You gave me chills with this story! I freaking loved it!
Brilliant storytelling Kodah!
One of my daughters always hated dolls when she was a child. She said they were creepy with creepy eyes like they were watching her every move. This story made me think of her and a couple of doll-related horror tales from her childhood. Excellent work, Kodah!!!
WOW. Was not expecting this darkness but it was wonderful. What a great, creative story. I think I will remember this secret for a very long time. And the music just made it that much more powerful.
This is absolutely awesome to the extreme! I didn't know where you going with it at first. Smart to stick it in Fiction instead of Horror! I'm going to remember that trick!! It took me a moment to realize it was a doll. And then it was surprise after surprise after that! I often don't listen to provided music but I did with this... and yes. It added to the creepiness of it. I think it's brilliant also to leave certain tidbits for the reader's imagination, so not revealing the doll's name really adds to the theme. This is short but *powerful*. Fun way to start my day! ⚡💙⚡
A macabre microfiction, perfectly matched with the music, Kodah!
Kodah, I love the way you pair music with your stories. That’s so clever. And this was creepy AF!! Thought the opening to your story was absolutely fantastic. Well done.
This was incredibly creepy and twisted! Very interesting themes of freedom, regret, and what they all mean too. Great work!
The pic already had me creeped out, and by the time I got to "secret," I was sure where this story was going. It had a nice little twist with the dad.
Oh, wow, Kodah, this was quite twisted. I think the father here is the ultimate unwitting sacrifice. I felt for him more than for anyone in the story.