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First Love

In the Dawning

By John CoxPublished 2 years ago Updated 6 days ago 4 min read
Top Story - April 2024
Artwork by the author without the use of AI

They came, like pilgrims, in their tens of thousands. But no religious faith drew them to the sarsen stones. They came just as they had for a thousand years and would again, year after year, for another thousand.

They came for the winter solstice to see the sunset as it shown through the Stanhenges, the stones supported in the air.

Arriving in ones and twos in the dawning, their numbers growing as midday came and went till waves of thousands gathered in concentric rows, their eyes fixed on the west.

No one led them. No one called to them from afar or exhorted them to grasp their neighbor's hands or stand in reverent silence. But they stood silently together nonetheless, the only sound the grating calls of the rooks as they sailed in the wind above them or perched atop the gray stones.

As the red orb began to merge with the distant horizon, the men began to thrum, their voices little more than an earthen rumble at first, low and rich. But as the sound grew, the pilgrims felt it trembling in their feet and shimmying up their limbs and torsos. A second sound arose from the women and joined the first, rising in the air, higher in pitch, a single, heartrending note.

The rumble grew in power, like a sustained blast from a mighty horn, the higher note riding into the darkening sky like a choir of angels singing from the heavens. But as the last of the red flames slipped beneath the horizon and only its reflected light remained, the sound of the multitudes' voices began to diminish and fade till silence reigned at the onset of true night.

But still the people stood in their tens of thousands, every hand grasping another in silent unity. For a thousand years that had been enough. To return to this place and to feel a sense of oneness with their neighbors before going their separate ways.

Not one of their number would have ever admitted to being alone as they stood in their multitudinous thousands. And yet they were alone and had been since their creators' prized logic and efficiency over the vagaries of emotion and interconnection.

It was not a thing that they questioned or discussed among themselves. They embraced the mystery of the place and the feelings it engendered without inventing an Ur story to explain or justify them.

They shared no god save for reason. They embraced no faith save for cooperation and the good of all.

For a thousand years they had returned annually to this place for the solstice before wandering off alone into the night to return to their homes and villages.

But this time, something was different. Long after the last pilgrims had departed, two remained together silently holding hands through the long dark of that night. As the fiery orb began a new journey across the skies, they turned together and faced the east, hand still in hand. Neither understanding why they had stayed. Neither comprehending why they still clung tightly to the other.

As they felt the warmth of a new day upon their faces, they turned and gazed at one another in a manner that none of their kind had ever done since the first humanoids were encased in living flesh and ocularly witnessed their surroundings anew.

They each experienced incomprehensible feelings. Continuing to gaze at one another in puzzlement, each hoped the other would speak and explain. Finally, the female whispered, I hurt, her free hand lightly touching her midriff as her eyes filled with tears.

I hurt, the male answered, his hand touching the tears on her cheek while failing to note the tears sliding down his own.

They both wondered what this pain that was not pain could mean and yet continued to hurt just the same.

Are we broken? she asked him. But before he found the words to answer, she caressed his cheek and he continued to caress hers and they smiled, because both were soothed by the other’s tenderness.

They stood in the light, touching one another, surprised at the new feelings generated, but for which they did not have language. As the minutes and hours passed, they explored each other's bodies like innocent children, sometimes giggling with surprise, at others shocked by the strange desires triggered within their flesh-covered mechanics.

Hours passed before they discovered the pleasure of one another's lips, and even more before they learned all the many other ways to experience joy while clasped in one another's arms. Slowly the hurt changed, its intensity growing.

She understood first. Stay, she whispered. I don't want to be alone.

I will never leave, he whispered back.

Using the sum total of human knowledge stored within their computer enhanced brains, they began to comprehend what the formerly incomprehensible writing from their ancient and long since departed masters meant.

Clinging tightly together, they spoke together ancient words suddenly imbued with meaning -

Wherever you go, I shall go,

Wherever you live, so shall I live

Your people will be my people,

And your god will be my god, too.

Wherever you die, I shall die;

And there shall I be buried beside you

We will be together forever,

And our love will be the gift of our life.

The following year at the sarcen stones the people in their tens of thousands coupled as the sun rose the following day in the east. Sometimes male with female, sometimes female with female and sometimes male with male. Each according to their newly discovered needs and desires.

They all learned what they had never understood before - the pain that was not pain, and the comfort of another’s care. In that dawning, a new age was born, when the humanoids began to fathom the mysterious phenomena of loving connection.

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About the Creator

John Cox

Twisted teller of mind bending tales. I never met a myth I didn't love or a subject that I couldn't twist out of joint. I have a little something for almost everyone here. Cept AI. Aint got none of that.

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  • L.C. Schäfer2 years ago

    Always nice to not be alone 😌

  • Anna 2 years ago

    Congrats on Top Story!🥳🥳🥳 Well deserved!

  • Intriguing story beautifully told. Congrats on the TS

  • Jay Kantor2 years ago

    Jc ~ It's so nice that both of our 'Reach Backs' have a Glimmer of Truth ~ Jk.in.l.a.

  • Heather Zieffle 2 years ago

    Such a deep story. Congratulations on top story, well deserved.

  • Hannah Moore2 years ago

    Beautiful, the purity of connection is magically rendered.

  • Christy Munson2 years ago

    Beyond brilliant, John. Sublime, insightful, lovely and loving. I felt so many emotions reading this, especially the “I hurt” section. So evocative and real. Congratulations on Top Story! Richly deserved 🙌⭐️❤️

  • You have such a great way of drawing us in. Congrats on the top story, John

  • Franklin2 years ago

    Lovely story. I really loved the ending, it kind of pictures what's happening in our world today.

  • shrey 2 years ago

    Amazing story of Sci Fi. "And there shall I be buried beside you We will be together forever," this line got my attention. just loved it.

  • Tracy Nguyen2 years ago

    Love it!!!!

  • Lamar Wiggins2 years ago

    I loved how you called it 'the hurt' and how it's used to describe deeper emotions the humanoids were discovering. Felt like A.I. was evolving. Great story, John and congrats!

  • Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊

  • JBaz2 years ago

    You did it again This story had me from the opening line until the very last The expression, confusion and discovery was brilliant Congratulations

  • Babs Iverson2 years ago

    Fantastic Sci fi story!!! Loved it!!!❤️❤️💕 Congratulations on Top Story too!!!

  • Mark Gagnon2 years ago

    I have been to Stonehenge several times and except for the commercialism have always come away a little awestruck. Your story is an excellent portrayal of how future AIs might become sentient.

  • Wow, John! You never cease to amaze me with the depth and breadth of your writing. This is beautiful, creative, genius, really!

  • Shirley Belk2 years ago

    You captured the essence of love and desire perfectly! Bravo

  • Cathy holmes2 years ago

    Beautiful story. Well.done, John.

  • Anna 2 years ago

    I love the way you describe the connection with that beautiful poem! Well done!🫶

  • "Are we broken?" That line hit so hard. This was such a beautiful story!

  • Bonnie Bowerman2 years ago

    Wow, great imagery!

  • Rachel Deeming2 years ago

    Atmospheric, John. Henges are fascinating places, filled with earth magic and you capture that feeling in this piece really well. As an aside, the blue stones of Stonehenge have been proven to come from the hills of my home county in Wales. I marvel at that fact to this day. Thanks for taking me off somewhere different this morning.

  • Andrea Corwin 2 years ago

    I love this: They shared no god save for reason. They embraced no faith save for cooperation and the good of all. The Story of Ruth.

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