Brielyn
short story

The river ran backwards on the day the Queen vanished. The ground of the earth itself went cold and lifeless when she was taken, and the stars did not glow; they simply sat in the sky, dim and dull and sad—waiting.
Down past the river, all the way down to the precipice of the sea, the sound of running could be heard. Footsteps pounded the grass, violent and relentless and all in unision. The cold air hung dankly all around these running men, an air that would have chilled the regular human to their core. But there was a warmth that radiated from above them in the body they held upright like the glowing licks of a fire, like a soft orange candlelight illuminating the dark, snuffing out the cold around them like a flame.
Brie—the bringer of warmth—had been taken, and all that was and breathed and existed suddenly changed and darkened, halting for her return.
For the trees—the trees did not rise before Queen Brielyn’s eyes; rather, they curled. They knit themselves into thick, twisting tendrils above her, melding into the inky night sky in blots of black and brown like an oil painting. An abyss of those pale yellow stars twinkled in the distance, illuminating the looming, curling oaks that seemed to reach for her with every upward jolt of her limp, motionless frame.
Everything was dark; everything was spinning.
Questions swam across the Queen’s mind at a rapid whirlwind of a pace. Who were these people? To what kingdom did they belong? How had they taken her, and what drug in their possession had been able to render her so helpless? Was she hurt? Was she bleeding? She didn’t feel hurt—she didn’t feel much of anything, really. She tried to open her mouth, but she could barely move her lips and couldn’t use her voice to speak. It felt stuck somewhere within her, her throat raw and burning as she tried to find it, like her larynx had been bruised and beaten by some invisible, inconceivable force.
This proved that she was utterly paralyzed, and if she’d been anyone else in the world other than Brielyn of Wiloh, she knew she would feel afraid. When was the last time, she wondered to herself, with a distant sort of wistfulness, that she’d been at risk of feeling afraid of something, of anything? Fear was a very human emotion, one she had experienced quite rarely in her young life. The thought struck her into contemplation, and it was the only thing she found herself able to cling to as her body was propelled further through the woods, swiftly and without a sound.
The morbid curiosity of the whole situation, above all else, was driving her up a wall, and Brie thought she might go mad with the silence. How many men were carrying her through the trees—five? Ten? She didn’t know. She couldn’t hear their footsteps or see their faces. She could barely feel their hands holding her, could hardly discern the tightness of the bindings around her ankles and wrists. Simple ropes were what constrained her—how embarrassing. Brie would have laughed if she could.
From an outsider looking in, as these men surely were—how very cliché it all was, really.
Unbeknownst to them, however, she was not one to go down easy. They would find that out soon enough.
No world halted for an ordinary woman, nor an ordinary Queen.
Then everything opened, all too suddenly. Brie felt her body being hoisted high into the open air, as if lifted by itself, as if she could fly, before she plummeted down, down, down. She couldn’t see anything but blackness; she could only feel the fall, and it sucked the air out of her lungs, nearly leaving her breathless.
Brie finally let her eyes fall shut, giving into that bleak, colorful unconsciousness.
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Edit: I had to make some quick changes to get this over 600 words for the challenge—I hope it still flows okay!
Thanks for reading! ♥️
About the Creator
angela hepworth
Hello! I’m Angela and I enjoy writing fiction, poetry, reviews, and more. I delve into the dark, the sad, the silly, the sexy, and the stupid. Come check me out!



Comments (13)
I love the attention to details here. Congrats on TS.
Hey dear Angela! Your writing style is captivating and your world-building is truly impressive. The way you've described the impact of Brielyn's absence on the world is both poetic and chilling. I can't wait to see how the story unfolds. Keep up the great work!
This stream of consciousness was truly terrifying and breathtaking. Amazing work
Wooow that was fantastic, I liked it
That was a great first paragraph. Oh my, when you started building the world around them, the story was coming alive for me. It was like a touch on the shoulder. It felt like my reality was disappearing around me. ~The bringer of warmth~ I love that. When you began to talk about the trees, it really sounded like you were in your element. Is fantasy your favourite genre to write in? The way you described Brie being thrown down painted too vivid a picture, I was scared for her. Also, congratulations on your Top Story 🎊🥳🎊
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Great writing and an amazing story. Congratulations on the much deserved Top Story recognition.
Gorgeous writing! It flows really well too :) Your writing is always so vivid. It's such a treat to read!
Oh my, poor Brie! She's just so helpless. Loved your story!
Think this is one of my favorite entries. Your language is amazing and I love how you finished the final para.
OMG! That second paragraph is SO LUSH with vivid details!! But what happened???
Wow 😮 what an ending. I love how you describe her falling unconscious. Awesome writing.
I love the motif of the ground, how it starts and finishes with the ground... it's really clever. Also the ending is so dark omg