Answers?
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Katie
I open the door and a woman is standing there. It takes me a moment to realise who she is and I watch as her face goes through a range of expressions: determination, the readiness for a fight; puzzlement, a surprise that has taken her aback; hope, a light that unknits her features; realisation, a hammer to the face that crushes it.
Her posture changes too, from firm to smaller, like a shrivelled mushroom. She's got here quicker than I thought she would.
And now, I'm scared.
*
Bethan
It's not Laney.
That would be too wonderful. But there is something of Laney about her.
It's reflections of Dave I see. She is watching me as I look at her. It is Dave's wary gaze, I can see in her eyes; the way he looked at me in the days following Laney's disappearance, with concern but also fear, at my railing and my despair. He couldn't handle it, made him jittery. I put it down to his own feelings of grief and his inability to express them, talk about them. I spilled; he bottled.
I don't know what to do. I have questions but I'm almost afraid to ask. She's a similar age to Laney...
I can't just stand here.
*
"Hello."
"Hi. Can I help you?"
"I'm looking for a man called Dave. Does he live here?"
"Yes. My dad's called Dave."
"Oh. Your dad."
"Yes."
"Is he in?"
"No. He's out."
"Oh."
"Is there a message...?"
"Um, er, no, I don't know, I just wanted to, um..."
"I know."
"You know what?"
"What you wanted."
Pause.
"Who are you?"
"My name's Katie."
"Katie. Oh. And you're Dave's daughter?"
"Yes."
"And you know who I am?"
"Yes."
"How?"
"You're Laney's mum. Dad's other wife. Bethan."
Silence.
"I sent you the photo. Of the boys."
"You sent it?"
"Yes."
"But how? No, I mean where did it come from? How did you get it? Who took it?"
"I don't know. I mean, I know some things but..."
Silence.
"Some things? What do you mean? This is so confusing..."
"I think I can give you some answers..."
*
Bethan
Answers. All I've ever wanted was answers.
I step inside.
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366 words
Bethan may get to know some things today but where will it lead? Katie's revelations may just blow some lives apart.
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Comments (14)
this is a masterstroke in storytelling! well done, chum!
She's about to truly open the can of worms....
So it was Katie that sent pictures..... but where is this going??? We still don't know if Dave had some part of Laney's disappearance. 🕵️♀️
How awkward to be Katie on this scenario! More great storytelling with each episode!
Hmmm. They might not be the answers she wants though. This is so BRILL!!
Still loving it; still hungry for more!
You left off at a great place, nice tension buld and leaving so many questions unanswered.
I am SO ready for some answers! The suspense is masterful :)
I love how you made Bethan's emotion visible in that first paragraph. And "I spilled, he bottled." Chef kiss for that one. On to the next.
So suspenseful, Rachel, I almost hate that it’s constrained by the word limit and I have to wait to the next one.
This is so realistic… good on Katie for being honest and not fobbing Bethan off👍🏼.
"I spilled; he bottled" this is great!!! Stopped me in my tracks for awhile to munch on the taste of it.
"Dad's other wife". Gosh that would have broke me if I was Bethan. Can't wait for the next part!
Emotional complexity and high-tension story. You enjoy writing, for sure!