103rd Times a Charm
Practice makes perfect… right?
“Clink! Where are we with this?” I hiss quietly, knowing my communicator will pick it up.
“Sorry Boss! This hack is taking a minute,”
“You know I’m the one stuck between two walls, right? We don’t have a minute!” I grump, readying the wall cutters.
“Yup.”
“Yup? The fuck? Clink!”
Silence.
“I swear Clink, if…”
“Got it! Go, now!”
“Fuck!” I swear, but I’m already cutting a person sized hole in the wall.
No alarms sound as I step through, and I wipe the sweat from my brow.
“Pattern, Clink! Your right, my left, like we discussed!” I demand.
My sweat soaks me as Clink walks me through the steps to get over the sensor plated flooring.
“No sweat.” I say as I make it across, sans alarm, snorting at my pun.
“Next?”
“The laser wall is… 3 inches to your left.”
My heart seizes as a blare deafens me. The alarm!
“It might have been 2.5 inches,” Clink gulps.
I turn to run, too late. A hot pinch knocks the breath out of me as a bullet burst from my chest.
Jerking awake, the simulator hums as it winds down. “Clink, run it again! 103rd times a charm!”
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Heather Zieffle
I'm an avid fantasy and sci-fi romance writer who enjoys dabbling in other genres from time to time. I have a few self-published books on Kindle so please check them out!
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Dear Heather - Permission to speak freely? You asked for feedback. Are you a Teacher? I'm so far out of the loop but I realize the F' word is totally colloquially accepted, if for no other reason, as a tip of the tongue filler word; it just doesn't get a rise as it once did long ago. But, I see a lot of 'Atta-Girl' comments may disagree. I'm just an adjunct biz law pro-bono professor; giving back to the community. It is never relevant in my arena to do F' fillers; or workable. Not my intent to make a big issue or insult in any way at all: I will delete it in a few moments so not to embarrass. Perhaps you do this as a Fit-In Tactic: Never write for 'Them'...be you, Heather, a very good thing. Please forgive this intrusion. I say this with respect for your marvelous talent even if it weren't F'WordLess. j.in.l.a.
I always enjoy that moment when the reader finds out the significance of the title. Great reveal!
Marvelous work! Keep it going—congrats!
Well done on the T.S.! 😁
lol. This was both intense and well written but also somehow, hilarious at the end. Awesome job. Congrats on TS! Subscribed ;)
Hahahha, that was unexpected. Brilliant. I love how captivating it was, and then surprise! Thank you.
Nice writing!
Very intense... I could hear the tension music playing. Great work building the atmosphere.
Love the momentum! Congrats on TS!
Impressive work with the brief form!
What a delightful and engaging read - so deserving of the TS! WELL DONE!
Great title and micro - I'd read the 104th's attempt!
Simulators!!! Well Done!!! Lovedit!!! Congratulations in T S too!!!❤️❤️💕
Wow,the story is very interested and awesome
Oh, how cool!! I loved the surprise at the end. This was such an engaging read :) Congratulations on Top Story!!
Congratulations on your Top Story
And around it goes again, love the concept