The Old Man and the Sea
If I count my words different than you do I still have to use 50
An old man, a sea
A weathered determination
A journey taken, a boat worn
DiMaggio in newspaper pages
Three days fishing, a Marlin
Blood in the water, Mako sharks
Strength of courage, of love, told in a tale
A boy’s dedication, a skeleton
Dreams of lions on an African beach
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Awesome. Well done.
Very well put. Well done.
What a summary!
Lovely! I need to read this book again!
Good job, I wish I remembered the story, he was battling with a fish I thought. The poems makes me want to reread the story
great choice! loved the structure of this one :) congrats on TS!
Love this
Congratulations on top story
Nicely done!
Incredible, congratulations on top story💐
Congratulations on the top story
Congratulations on Top Story!
Love this critique ❤️ Well done 😊
Congrats on the well deserved top story!
Very well done. Perfect description. Congrats on the Top Story.
Summed up nicely. I struggled with The Old Man and The Sea. It didn't move me like I thought it would. I got it- allegorically as well as literally - but I found it a bit of a chore. These critiques have shown me that there are lots of work in the literary canon that I have no appreciation for - Wuthering Heights, The Turn of the Screw and now this! Anyway, less about me. Critique was spot on and congrats!
This book is on my list of must read's. Though what I know of it, you nailed it in 50 words! Stunning work, Will! This should definitely place. Congrats too on Top Story!
Congratulations on Top Story!
This is the best of these I've read. Totally brings back DiMaggio's bone-spur (Hemingway was the first I ever heard about that) and the taste of raw tuna with lime, delicious! Your review is written out of an intimate acquaintance with and understanding of the text, which comes as a pleasant change when certain other entrants in this challenge don't even seem to have read their books of choice. Congratulations!
That was an essence dripped from the novel. I liked the arrangement of words. Plus, I also liked the ending, the dream that the old man always sees, the African Lions on the beach.
Wow! That was awesome! Congrats!!!
Congrats on your TOP STORY!
Wonderful!@@ congratulations on Top Story!!!♥️♥️💕
Congrats on the TS.
Excellent, like the structure and description. Congratulations