Fiction
Barbie Review
“Barbie” was one of the best movies that I have seen in a while. She evoked true empathy for both women and men. I have never seen a movie capture the topic of gender equality in such a sweet, yet strong way. It was very creative! Bravo and well done!
By Kristen Ulrich2 years ago in Critique
A Court of Thorns and Roses, Sarah Maas
There is no better way to spend a day than with a Sarah Maas book. I could just live in the world she has created. No fantasy info-dumping, or paragraph long descriptions. Only magic, and color, and wonder, with a good dash of humor throughout. I recommend it to everyone.
By Sarah Massey2 years ago in Critique
~Hercules Ring~ Additional story information! Free for people to critique!
~Hercules Ring~ *Background details of Hercules story and the information that changed his life forever and made him into the strong man and hero with a desire to be good and help others have good lives to live free of suffering or at least able to bare it! I'm looking for ideas, and suggestions on when and where to write in the details and information that is needed for the larger story to come together better and make sense as a whole! This is not an easy project to write so anyone with ideas or experience in exploring mythical history of such a nature (including Hercules history) are welcome to provide material or direction that will help improve the story and make it that much more better! And here is the link to the original submitted first chapter to my work. https://shopping-feedback.today/fiction/hercules-ring I'm waiting for contest results before I can re-submit the whole body of new work to the new Chapters group!*
By Jennifer Cooley2 years ago in Critique
‘My Name Is Yara Sulimayah’ -The Kingdom Over The Sea
‘She let out a breath she didn’t realise she was holding.’ A sentence I have read numerous times throughout my reading life and one that I have a secret love for. I often play ‘Where’s Wally’ with this quote, squealing when I come across it in a book.
By Sarah O'Grady2 years ago in Critique
The Midnight Society
When I was just thirteen years old, I had the idea for this story. It was full of corruption, espionage, world politics, and maybe just slightly too ambitious for a kid. But I loved writing it. The research for how political power works, types of governments and their function, cold wars and espionage was endlessly fascinating. Crafting plot twist after plot twist, betrayal after betrayal, characters so real I could almost see them sitting before me was what gave me my kick start into writing. It got complicated, and twisted, and I was horrible at keeping up with notes, so I lost the trail of the plot and the enthusiasm to continue it.
By Sarah Massey2 years ago in Critique
A YA Story Looking for Input
*** This is basically an excerpt from a YA/Upper Middle grade story looking for critique.*** My main questions would be - from the perspective of a reader of this genre - does the story grab your attention? What needs to be added to make it more interesting? And, of course, if you notice any grammatical errors or clumsy sentences, feel free to point them out also. Add any critiques to the comment section, or PM if you would like it to be kept more quiet.
By KJ Aartila2 years ago in Critique
Sun & Sand. Top Story - August 2023.
Evan Forrester stalked up the beach and to the beachside bar at least six steps ahead of Katie. This left plenty of room for people to not believe that they were a pair and those people innocently cut in between the two people as groups either made their ways back to the beach or up to the bar as well. A few of them were kind enough to mumble “excuse me” or “pardon me.” No one hung back and allowed her to catch back up with Evan; no one knew about the infractions that they were committing. No; it was the young group of college aged males who knowingly and indiscreetly stared at her to size her up that really bothered the brunette beauty. Had it been in her nature, she might have flipped them off. Today, she was dangerously close to that being in her nature.
By Kent Brindley2 years ago in Critique
Beneath Six Feet - Episode 2
The cold, unforgiving reality of a graveyard weighed heavily on the heart. The air was thick with a melancholic stillness that seemed to permeate the very essence of the place. Beneath a looming canopy of gray clouds, a lone coffin lay poised at the edge of a freshly dug grave, a silent testament to the inevitability of mortality. It was a scene that evoked a poignant blend of emotions, a mixture of grief and contemplation, as those gathered around the grave confronted the fragility of existence.
By Rev Dr. Alexander Fenning-Sencherey2 years ago in Critique
Advice Needed: A Yam's Tale
Hello there, everyone! I am once again taking another break from my regularly scheduled fiction to publish something in the new critique community. It was created by Vocal at a perfect time for me as, sat within my memory stick, a small story opening has existed. The problem with it is... I have no idea where to go with it!
By ThatWriterWoman2 years ago in Critique
