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By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
The Hostile Hospital
Number 8 in the Snicket series 'The Hostile Hospital' finds the Baudelaire children acting as VFD volunteers and even hospital employees searching for a file to help themselves and the Quagmire triplets in some way. Count Olaf and his cohorts come along and once again do their dastardly activities. The Baudelaire's seemed to always be one step ahead and two or three steps backwards at times when things seem to be working out like in 'The Vile Village' with the handyman, but then turned sour once again when the rope ladder broke, and they walked to the Heimlich Hospital presently.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
The Vile Village
Here is another Snicket writing #7 The Vile Village and more clues on V.F.D. and a lot of strange and mean rules that everyone in this crow invested village has to live with day to day. The Baudelaire's do meet one nice person who actually likes these three children in this part of their story. In a very short scene you, the reader, will kind of meet a relation to the author himself. 'The Vile Village' is one part of their journey you do not want to miss for there are a few happy moments for these three kids here.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Rainy Saturday morning
What to do on a rainy, wet Saturday morning? You think to yourself and you begin to wonder about this little dilemma. You cared for your dog and did a few little chores. You get an idea, and you begin to write and write and write. Then, it strikes you do you start a new idea with some note, or do you continue your typing the book you finished writing for I am an old-fashioned writer that writes everything in a notebook first and I am a laborious typist. Well, I better start typing for this drabble is at end.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
Is Nagano Tonic Really as Effective as People Claim for Healthy Weight Loss Stabilization? A Critical Analysis
As more people turn to natural supplements for weight management, Nagano Tonic has emerged as a popular choice for those seeking a holistic approach to sustainable weight loss. Marketed as a gentle yet effective tonic, it claims to support metabolism, control cravings, and boost energy without the harsh effects of stimulants.
By Alvin V. Stoneabout a year ago in Critique
The Darkness
I’m thinking of starting a novel, but I could really use some help brainstorming ideas and themes. Here’s a quick summary of what I have in mind. If you have any suggestions on how to take this story further, I’d love to hear them! It’s going to be a sci-fi adventure about a professor who’s on a quest to uncover the secrets of the universe. But guess what? He’s not alone! A dark force is trying to show him what the universe really means, and it’s not going to be easy. He’ll have to face an ancient battle to learn the lessons he needs to find the answers he’s been searching for.
By Thomas Terryabout a year ago in Critique
All Saints Day
November 1st is All Saints Day and a day to remember all who have gone before to the get reward what is known as Heaven. To me this is the day that my older brother died, and this is a day that I think of him as I just did. Now on this day I remember him and now my mom and dad. This is a day that is sad, but yet happy for I know that one day we will see each other again just don't know when exactly, but till then I will remember them every day. Amen.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
WIP - Neverchangeable
The Premise: I've been struggling with this story for close to a year now. It was inspired by a customer who told me a story about his friend doing something illegal, even though he'd just become a father. The customer shook his head and said, "People never change. Not really."
By sleepy draftsabout a year ago in Critique
The Ersatz Elevator
Number Six of Lemony Snicket's series of the Baudelaire's. 'The Ersatz Elevator' find the children leaving Prufrock Prepatory School and living with Jerome and Esme in a very large apartment in a very tall building with a lot of rooms. What is 'In' and was is 'Out' is the question that Violet, Klaus and Sunny need to figure to save some friends and once again try to rid themselves of Count Olaf and could it happen down an elevator shaft or at an auction where people only want what is 'In'. More to come in this series of unfortunate events.
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
The Notebook
On the desk is a stack of notebooks. Some are full of notes, and some are full of a little bit of everything from stories to poems to articles of various subjects. There are some that are empty and ready to be filled. What do you suppose should fill them? I know that some would start a possible novel or maybe a collection of short stories. At time I was thinking of a textbook dealing with American history for preschoolers or primary children. Yes, I am that writer with the stack of notebooks on my desk. What do you think?
By Mark Grahamabout a year ago in Critique
