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Terminator 2 judgement day
Terminator 2, one of if not my favorite movie of all time. A fantastic sequel that should be the blueprint for all sequels. Perfectly balancing expanding on the story and characters, providing fan service of the original film, and providing great twists throughout the whole movie. Truly a masterpiece film.
By Dyllon Rodillon2 years ago in Critique
Kokushinsan: Shadow of the Mountain Prologue - Childhood
Below the sharp, snow-covered peaks, an ocean of golden barely bent and ripples traveled among the fields. A dusty veil helped make those labyrinths of rock, ice, and snow seem a distant world. Up in the thin air of the Himalayan mountains, work was tedious and the yield was difficult, but at times like these, it was a better life, even in the shadow of Kokushinsan.
By Christopher Michael2 years ago in Critique
Draft: De-cluttering
*If you want to skip ahead to the part I want feedback on, scroll down to the header labeling the drafted poem below. Lately, I have been having trouble with endings. Starting poems or prose is the easy part. A line comes to me and often starts as a quick note in my phone. It's easy to run with it, but where do I stop and how?
By Kay Husnick2 years ago in Critique
~Hercules Ring~ Additional story information! Free for people to critique!
~Hercules Ring~ *Background details of Hercules story and the information that changed his life forever and made him into the strong man and hero with a desire to be good and help others have good lives to live free of suffering or at least able to bare it! I'm looking for ideas, and suggestions on when and where to write in the details and information that is needed for the larger story to come together better and make sense as a whole! This is not an easy project to write so anyone with ideas or experience in exploring mythical history of such a nature (including Hercules history) are welcome to provide material or direction that will help improve the story and make it that much more better! And here is the link to the original submitted first chapter to my work. https://shopping-feedback.today/fiction/hercules-ring I'm waiting for contest results before I can re-submit the whole body of new work to the new Chapters group!*
By Jennifer Cooley2 years ago in Critique
Breaking Down the VA Rating Schedule: Key Insights for Veterans
Breaking Down the VA Rating Schedule: Key Insights for Veterans Navigating the VA Rating Schedule can feel like walking through a maze. It's packed with percentages and provisions that seem to change at every turn. But don't worry, this guide breaks down the rating schedule into easy-to-understand pieces. We'll explain how the system works and offer key insights for veterans. By the end of this guide, you'll approach the VA Rating Schedule with confidence and better understand how it impacts your benefits.
By Jason Baril2 years ago in Critique
Advice Needed: A Yam's Tale
Hello there, everyone! I am once again taking another break from my regularly scheduled fiction to publish something in the new critique community. It was created by Vocal at a perfect time for me as, sat within my memory stick, a small story opening has existed. The problem with it is... I have no idea where to go with it!
By ThatWriterWoman2 years ago in Critique
Avoid These Common Mistakes at Your Social Security Disability Consultative Exam
Avoid These Common Mistakes at Your Social Security Disability Consultative Exam If you're seeking benefits, you'll want to avoid any missteps during your Social Security Disability Consultative Exam. It's a key stage in the process! This exam can determine whether or not you'll receive the benefits you need. But don't worry, we're here to guide you. We've gathered the most common mistakes people make. Armed with this knowledge, you can approach your consultative exam with confidence and increase your chances of success. Let's dive in and learn how to avoid these pitfalls.
By Jason Baril2 years ago in Critique
