Until I Had None Left To Give
For Harmonic Verses Challenge
So, I already had an entry for this challenge, and would have loved to have done something using my voice, etc., but I do not really have the resources or the budget for that. My first entry was solely the lyrics and structure, with lots of information about how I would have composed it if I had the time, resources, and skills.
So for my next couple of entries, I've opted for AI music generation. I am in two minds about it, as I value the creation of music organically by people, but as it is allowed for the basis of this challenge, I've been a bit lenient on my ideology. I told it I wanted it to be symphonic metal, post-hardcore, and no-wave. It mostly produced a post-hardcore/metalcore song, which is fine.
Here is the track in all its glory, followed by the lyrics.
Intro
Chant chant chant chant
decant the descent
Chant chant chant chant
descent by the cent
Verse One
When we first learn to count,
when we are so young, so naΓ―ve.
we learn to count in easy sets
we learn to count in easy sets
I started with so many, an arbitrary
number or value, heavy, with meaning
Chorus
But we are happy, if we are happy?
can we be happy? if we are destined to lose out on all that we gave, all that we were, when we're buried with the remains of our bodies or charred to ash, as the metal is removed and given to our loved ones to pour down a well, down a gutter straight to hell
Diversion (I actually meant this as a cue, rather than part of the words, but love that the AI included it)
argh, we live, we breathe, we die, we live, we count, we lie
Verse Two
I started with say, 100, that many?
As the time marched on, as life moved
on and up, I lost 10, not many?
Hurt myself, hurt others, lost 10
again, another and another 10
are you keeping count, keeping score?
Chorus
But we are happy, if we are happy?
can we be happy? if we are destined to lose out on all that we gave, all that we were, when we're buried with the remains of our bodies or charred to ash, as the metal is removed and given to our loved ones to pour down a well, down a gutter straight to hell
Bridge
Another 10 down the drain
another 10 felt the pain
another 10 Astro plane
saw the hurt in others caused
by others, selfishly, aimlessly
for greed, creed, propaganda
and more, 10 dropped, 10 left
I kept losing and losing
10 after 10 until
I had no fucks left to give
Final Chorus/Outro
But we are happy, if we are happy?
can we be happy? if we are destined to lose out on all that we gave, all that we were, when we're buried with the remains of our bodies or charred to ash, as the metal is removed and given to our loved ones to pour down a well, down a gutter straight to hell
10 after 10 until
I had no fucks left to give
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"Do It Again" the track that would ultimately open the Beach Boys final album on Capitol Records which was released on February 10th 1969 had originally been released as a single in August of 1968. The track was the first of many post-Pet Sounds era throwbacks to the early Beach Boys sound which would become continually more cliched and eventually lead the Beach Boys to the level of self-parody they would eventually succumb to in the 1980s while their closest contemporaries The Beatles nearing the end of their run in 1969 would go on to be viewed as the most influential band of all time. However, the song itself is not bad on its surface, and it opens with a futuristic sounding (for 1969) drumbeat captured by then-Beach Boys engineer Stephen Desper using tape delays on the drums performed by Dennis Wilson and John Guerin. The song has been re-recorded numerous times over the years on various Beach Boys-related projects most notably the 2011 re-recording at Capitol studios featuring the five surviving Beach Boys at the time backed instrumentally by various members of both the Brian Wilson Band and Mike Loves touring "Beach Boys" to promote the then upcoming Beach Boys 50th Anniversary reunion tour in 2012. The hammering and power drill sound at the end of the song was an excerpt from a track called "Workshop" that was to be a part of the uncompleted "SMiLE" album.
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I can relate to not having the resources for a full-on production. Using AI for music generation is interesting. You said you wanted symphonic metal, post-hardcore, and no-wave, but got a post-hardcore/metalcore song. Do you think the AI interpreted your request wrong? Or is it just hard to blend those genres precisely? Also, the lyrics seem thought-provoking. What inspired them?
I get your dilemma about using AI for music. It's tough to balance the organic creation we value. Your AI-generated track sounds interesting. How do you think the lack of hands-on composition affects the emotional connection in the music? I've always composed music the old - fashioned way. It makes me wonder how the AI interprets your symphonic metal and no - wave requests. Did it capture the essence at all?
Yay Paul!!!! Congrats on third most popular story this week!!! π
Wooohooooo congratulations on your Leaderboard placement! ππππππ
Very well written, congrats π
Well now, this fucking rocks! π₯π₯π₯ Love it!
Knowing your musical taste, I'm not shocked with the chosen genre for this!! My favourite line was "I had no fucks left to give" but that be just my general mood lately lol anyway, congrats on Top Story, Paul!!!!
Awesome song, my friend! Took a listen and read the other day but didnβt have time to comment. Def a lot of power and emotion in this. The whole lyric to AI thing is so interesting to meβ honestly Iβm not much of a heavy metal person, but this was fun. This challenge is like a cool way to learn more about a different side of everyone :) Congrats on Top Story!
Fantastic story and well written, good luck.
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Well done, Paul, you're are blitzing the Top Stories lately!
Interesting!!!
Great image for the title and the song!
You know, I went in really wanting to hate this (because fuck AI β signed all the creators it robs), but I can't hate it. It did a decent job. I do think it is an interesting illustration of AI's limits, though. The image generation has gotten decent. This song was decent. But when it came to following the lyrics, I found myself having to scroll along with the printed lyrics. For the most part, they could be understood, but every once in a while a word was skipped or lost for lack of being distinct against the melody. It's always in the fine details where AI breaks down. Even now, it still can't quite nail text in images. It still can't quite nail lyrics in songs. None of this is commentary on your entry, just where my mind went as I soaked in the full experience (song + printed lyrics). You certainly wrote a metal song, and without that, I doubt Suno would have been able to pull it off so well. So well done to you and the soulless machine
You put a lot of heart and thought into this β I can really feel the weight behind your lyrics. Thanks for sharing it! Congratulations on your Top Story!
I couldn't create something like this, with or without AI π¬
I'm still hoping to hear you sing one of your songs, Paul <3 lol ;)
YES!!! I was pleasantly surprised and pumped by the results. Definitely created a 'mood'. Nice entry, Paul!
What a great heavy metal piece. At times with the phrasing, it kind of reminded me of my favorite Billy Joel song 'We Didn't Start the Fire'.
Impressive effort! Despite containing a word forbidden to cross my lips, I am impressed with this and the AI generated music/song. It sounded the same as my adult son was playing just now as he washed the dishes!π€£He was impressed, especially with DIVERSION!πππΌ
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Interesting
Interesting. Not my type of music, lol, but well conceived & constructed.
Your lyrics are good and meaningful. Let me listen to the song. Bahahah! I donβt listen to metal. But this was cool and peppy! And so very very you. Well done Paul! ππ
Damn and here was me hoping Iβd hear you sing in a Scottish accent! ππ Fab title and lyrics!