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Weather: More Than Just Background Noise

Use Literary Devices to set the mood, mirror emotions, and drive the plot.

By C. L. NicholsPublished 12 months ago 12 min read

Weather isn’t just about saying it’s raining or sunny. A gloomy, overcast day reflects a character’s sadness, while a violent storm foreshadows trouble.

Instead of just saying, “It was raining”: “The rain tapped gently on the window, asking to be let in.” The rain becomes a shy visitor.

“The wind howled through the trees, angry at being ignored.” The wind isn’t just blowing. It has personality and emotion. It hints at what’s going on with your characters.

A simile might go: “The snowflakes fell as softly as whispered secrets.” It gives a clear image and adds mystery.

A metaphor could be: “The sun was a spotlight, exposing every flaw in the abandoned lot.” This describes the bright sunlight and sets a mood of scrutiny.

Choose comparisons that fit your story’s tone. A romance might use gentle images, while a thriller could go for intense ones.

Sensory Details: Don’t tell readers about the weather, make them feel it. Use all five senses to bring descriptions to life.

“The air hung heavy with moisture, clinging to skin like a damp cloth. The smell of wet earth filled her nostrils, while distant thunder rumbled, a bass note she could feel in her chest.”

Varying Sentence Structure Structure your sentences to mimic weather patterns. Choppy sentences convey the quick changes of a storm. Flowing sentences describe a lazy summer day.

“Rain. It started slowly. A drop. Then another. Soon, a steady patter turned into a roar, water sluicing down gutters and overflowing onto the streets.”

Sentence structure mirrors the building of the rainstorm, starts with punchy phrases and builds to a longer description as the rain intensifies.

Weather as a Plot Device Weather is more than a backdrop, it drives your story. A sudden snowstorm traps your characters together, forcing confrontations. A drought is a catalyst for community conflict.

“As the hurricane winds battered the coast, Marianne realized she couldn’t put off the decision any longer. Stay, and risk everything, or leave and lose the only home she’d ever known?”

The extreme weather forces the character into a crucial choice, tying the environment directly to the plot.

The Power of Contrast Powerful weather descriptions come from contrast. It’s a beautiful day during a funeral, or a peaceful snowfall in the middle of a war zone.

“The sun shone brightly, its warmth at odds with the cold grief that gripped Sarena’s heart as she stood by the grave.”

This contrast highlights emotions, creates irony, and makes the scene memorable.

Avoid Clichés We’ve read about raging storms and gentle breezes. These aren’t wrong, but they’re overused. Push yourself to find fresh ways to describe weather.

Instead of “It was a dark and stormy night,”: “Night had fallen like a bruise, purple and aching, as the storm flexed its muscles overhead.” It gives a stronger sense of mood and atmosphere.

Weather and Character Development Weather reflects a character’s mood, decisions, or growth. A character who’s afraid of storms has to face one to achieve their goal. Or a sunny day lifts a character out of depression, spurring them to action.

“As the fog slowly lifted, so did John’s confusion. Each patch of blue sky revealed brought with it a new clarity about what he had to do next.” This ties the external weather to the character’s internal path.

Regional and Cultural Aspects of Weather Different places have different weather, and people relate to weather differently. Use this to add authenticity.

“In Seattle, a day without rain was like a gift, cherished and savored. But for Aisha, newly arrived from Dubai, it was the rainy days that felt magical, each drop a tiny miracle.”

Subtle Descriptions Sometimes, less is more. Well-placed details can be effective.

“She shivered, pulling her coat tighter.” This simple sentence implies cold weather without going into a long description.

“Sweat beaded on his forehead as he waited.” We understand it’s hot without being told.

Different Genres How you use weather changes depending on the story you’re telling. In a romance, focus on how weather brings characters together. In a thriller, weather creates obstacles.

For a horror story: “The fog crept in, fingers of mist obscuring the path ahead, hiding who knows what in its murky embrace.”

For a romance: “Raindrops sparkled on her hair like tiny diamonds, and he realized he’d never seen anything more beautiful.”

Balancing Descriptions Weather is a tool, but don’t overdo it. Don’t drown readers in weather descriptions at the expense of plot and character development.

Weather as the Villain: Personification

Turn weather from a mere backdrop into a breathing antagonist in your stories.

Personification is giving human traits to non-human things. Give weather a personality, but not a nice one. Weather that bullies, attacks, and challenges your characters.

The Basics Set up weather as an antagonist from the get-go. Instead of “It was a stormy day,”: “The sky scowled down at the city, its dark clouds gathering like an army ready for attack.”

Give the sky intent. It’s not cloudy, it’s threatening the characters.

Rain: From Drizzle to Downpour It’s not falling, it’s got attitude.

“The rain came down in sheets, slapping windows and stinging exposed skin. Each droplet had a personal vendetta against anyone foolish enough to step outside.”

The rain isn’t heavy, it’s aggressive. It’s not falling, it’s attacking.

Wind: The Invisible Assailant It’s something we feel but can’t see.

“The wind howled through the streets, an invisible beast on a rampage. It shoved pedestrians off balance, yanked at clothes, and hurled debris like a child throwing a tantrum. She fought against it, each step a battle against an unseen foe determined to keep her from her destination.”

The wind becomes an active opponent. It’s not blowing, it’s fighting the character, creating tension.

Heat: The Oppressive Tyrant Hot weather can be tyrannical.

“The heat pressed down on the city like a smothering blanket, squeezing the life out of everything it touched. The sun, a merciless dictator, glared down from its throne in the sky, daring anyone to defy its rule. Even the asphalt seemed to bow under its oppressive reign, softening and bubbling in submission.”

Turn a hot day into an oppressive regime. The sun isn’t high temperature, it’s working to make life miserable.

Cold: The Creeping Invader Cold weather sneaks up on you.

“The cold crept in slowly, insidiously. It slithered under doorways, wormed its way through tiny cracks, and wrapped icy fingers around anything warm. By morning, it had staged a complete takeover, leaving the world brittle and hostile.”

This gives cold weather an invasive quality. It’s not a drop in temperature, it’s an invasion, turning the familiar world into something alien.

Fog: The Stealthy Predator Fog creates an eerie atmosphere.

“The fog rolled in like a predator stalking its prey. It swallowed streetlights whole, muffled sounds, and erased familiar landmarks. As it thickened, Tara felt like it was watching her, waiting for the right moment to pounce and drag her into its misty depths.”

The fog becomes an active threat. It’s not reducing visibility, it’s hunting the character, creating danger.

Snow: The Deceptive Trickster Snow gets a gentle treatment in writing. Flip that on its head.

“The snow fell in thick flakes, each one a tiny liar. They danced innocently in the air, promising beauty and wonder. But as they piled up, their true nature was revealed. They buried cars, blocked doors, and turned simple journeys into treacherous expeditions. The snow wasn’t here to play; it was here to trap.”

This turns the gentle snow into a deceitful antagonist, luring people in with beauty before revealing its dangerous nature.

Thunderstorms: The Raging Bully Thunderstorms are dramatic, but amp up the personification.

“The storm threw a tantrum of epic proportions. Lightning cracked like a whip, punishing the earth for some imagined slight. Thunder bellowed its rage, shaking windows and setting off car alarms in its fury. The wind and rain joined in, determined to make the world suffer for daring to enjoy a sunny day earlier.”

The storm becomes a full character, complete with motivations (though irrational ones) for its behavior.

Drought: The Patient Killer Drought is less dramatic than storms, but just as antagonistic.

“The drought settled in for the long haul, a patient killer biding its time. Day after day, it sucked moisture from the soil, withered plants, and cracked foundations. It was a slow, cruel siege, starving the land of the water it needed to survive. And all the while, it watched and waited, knowing that eventually, everything would crumble under its relentless assault.”

This turns the absence of rain into a malevolent force, slowly destroying everything.

Use these techniques in a longer passage:

“The year had been one long battle against the elements. Spring arrived with floods that clawed at foundations and drowned fields. Summer followed with a heat that crushed the life out of the land, leaving everything parched and gasping. Fall brought winds that howled like banshees, tearing leaves from trees and hope from hearts. And now, winter had settled in, armed with an arsenal of sleet, snow, and bone-chilling cold.

As Marianne looked out her window, she couldn’t shake the feeling that the weather had a personal grudge against her town. Each season seemed determined to outdo the last in its campaign of misery. The current snowstorm was no exception. It hurled itself against her house, seeking any weakness, any crack it could exploit. The wind screamed challenges, daring her to step outside.

Marianne sighed, knowing she had no choice. She had to get to work. As she bundled up, she prepared herself for the fight ahead. Just walking to her car would be like running a gauntlet, with the weather throwing everything it had at her. But she was determined. Let the weather rage. She’d show it that humans weren’t so easily beaten.”

This shows how to weave personified weather through a longer narrative, showing an ongoing conflict between characters and their environment.

Personification impacts pacing of a story:

Slowing the pace: Detailed personification slows down the narrative, letting readers linger on vivid imagery. Complex personification invites readers to reflect on deeper meanings.

Instead of stating “it was night”: “Night gathered its dark shawl close, a sympathetic conspirator” encourages readers to dwell on the atmosphere.

Enhancing fast-paced scenes: Concise personification quickens the pace. A brief personification like “the night concealed the killer” adds atmosphere without breaking momentum.

Creating rhythm: Varied personification contributes to the rhythm. Like a rollercoaster, it takes readers through fast-paced action or reflective moments. This keeps the story unpredictable.

Emphasizing key moments: Strategic personification highlights plot points and character developments. Slowing down the pace at crucial moments draws attention to significant details.

Setting mood and tone: Personification establishes the mood of a scene and affects how readers perceive the pacing. A personified setting that “groans” or “whispers” creates an atmosphere that influences how quickly or slowly readers read.

Balancing scene and summary: Personification is used in both detailed scenes and summarized passages. In scenes, it slows the pace by adding detail. In summaries, it provides snapshots that move the story quickly.

Personification is a powerful tool in creative writing. Some effective ways to use it:

Bring settings to life: Use personification to make your settings more dynamic. “The old house groaned as the wind battered its walls”.

Improve weather descriptions: Weather becomes a character in stories through personification. “The sun battled the clouds in a war that had households turning lights on and off”.

Highlight important objects: Give key items human qualities. “The roses bent toward them, listening” foreshadows the importance of roses in a mystery plot.

Create emotional connections: Personification helps readers empathize with non-human elements.

Show character relationships: Use personification to show how characters relate to objects, animals, or concepts. This adds depth to your characters.

Improve descriptions: Instead of using simple similes, personification makes descriptions more vivid.

Convey mood and tone: Personification sets the atmosphere of a scene. “The stubborn door refused to close” creates a different feeling than simply stating the door was stuck.

Symbolism and metaphor: Non-human things become symbols through personification, helping convey story themes.

Make abstract concepts tangible: Personification helps grasp abstract ideas by giving them human-like qualities.

Add humor: Personification injects playfulness into writing, making it entertaining.

Use personification purposefully. Choose non-human things that are relevant to your story and assign them appropriate human qualities that match their nature.

Literary Devices That’ll Make Your Writing Shine

<This is not a comprehensive listing of literary devices, but most common ones are included, with brief descriptions and examples.>

Metaphor: Comparing two unlike things without using “like” or “as.”

The sun was a blazing furnace in the cloudless sky.

Simile: Comparing two unlike things using “like” or “as.”

The raindrops fell like tiny diamonds from the heavens.

Personification: Giving human qualities to non-human things.

The wind whispered secrets through the trees.

Hyperbole: An extreme exaggeration.

It was so cold, even the polar bears were wearing scarves.

Onomatopoeia: Words that sound like what they describe.

The thunder rumbled and boomed, shaking the windows.

Alliteration: Repetition of initial consonant sounds.

Whistling winds whipped wildly around the house.

Assonance: Repetition of vowel sounds within words.

The gloomy moon loomed over the dusky sky.

Consonance: Repetition of consonant sounds within words.

The crisp frost crackled under our feet.

Imagery: Vivid descriptions that appeal to the senses.

The air was thick with humidity, clinging to our skin like a damp blanket.

Symbolism: Using an object or action to represent a broader idea.

The approaching storm clouds symbolized the character’s growing anxiety.

Foreshadowing: Hinting at future events.

Dark clouds gathered on the horizon, hinting at the trouble to come.

Pathetic fallacy: Attributing human emotions to nature or inanimate objects.

The gloomy sky reflected Sarah’s sadness as she walked home alone.

Oxymoron: Combining contradictory terms.

The gentle storm lulled everyone to sleep.

Paradox: A statement that seems contradictory but may be true.

The scorching sun left us feeling both energized and drained.

Irony: When the opposite of what’s expected happens.

We packed sunscreen and beach towels, only to be greeted by a sudden snowstorm.

Anaphora: Repetition of a word or phrase at the beginning of successive clauses.

The rain fell. The rain soaked. The rain washed away our worries.

Epistrophe: Repetition of a word or phrase at the end of successive clauses.

We danced in the rain, we sang in the rain, we laughed in the rain.

Polysyndeton: Using multiple conjunctions in close succession.

The sky was gray and gloomy and threatening and ominous.

Asyndeton: Omitting conjunctions between words, phrases, or clauses.

The wind howled, the rain poured, the lightning flashed.

Synecdoche: Using a part to represent the whole.

The umbrellas hurried down the street as the rain began to fall.

Metonymy: Substituting the name of an attribute for the thing itself.

The sunshine warmed our faces as we stepped outside.

Litotes: Understatement for emphasis, often using double negatives.

The hurricane wasn’t exactly a gentle breeze.

Euphemism: Using a mild or indirect word instead of a harsh or blunt one.

The weather was a bit under the weather that day.

Apostrophe: Addressing an absent person, thing, or abstract idea.

Oh, cruel winter, why must you linger so long?

Chiasmus: Reversing the order of words in parallel phrases.

When it rains, we complain; we rejoice when the sun shines.

Synesthesia: Describing one sensory experience in terms of another.

The thunder tasted like metal on our tongues.

Antithesis: Contrasting ideas expressed in a parallel structure.

The morning brought clear skies, but the evening delivered a downpour.

Climax: Arranging words, phrases, or clauses in order of increasing importance.

The breeze picked up, the wind howled, and the tornado touched down.

Anticlimax: The opposite of climax, ending with the least important element.

We prepared for a blizzard, a snowstorm, or at least a light dusting.

These literary devices create engaging weather descriptions. Mix and match them to paint a clear picture of the atmospheric conditions in your stories.

Use weather when it adds to the scene. Mood, obstacle, symbolism. If it’s just background, a brief mention is enough.

Weather in writing is more than just saying it’s hot or cold outside. It’s a versatile tool that adds depth, mood, and meaning to stories. Use literary devices and focus on creative descriptions to make your weather feel alive.

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About the Creator

C. L. Nichols

C. L. Nichols retired from a Programmer/Analyst career. A lifelong musician, he writes mostly speculative fiction.

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  • Alex H Mittelman 12 months ago

    Great work! Good advice! Wonderful!

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