Worth
Or the cost of leaving.
I taste you on the tip of my tongue
Like the words I forgot to say before you
Packed yourself up and stepped out of the car.
.
Nobody leaves like you do, in that mocking way
That reminds me of the shadows you do
Such a good job of mimicking.
.
I'm in a drought of compassion
Because you built this wall around the sky
And the clouds listen to you, who knows why.
.
This is a desert without your blood and tears
And I am roasting alive, so maybe it's
Not just fire and heat, but hellfire.
.
Maybe I'm screwed three times over.
Letting you leave was throwing your soul
Into the pit and now I wonder about your bones.
.
Have they gone to ash or will they fall from above
Like some twisted nightmare of fears
Spewed from the volcano's crown?
.
You should have gotten back in,
Slipping between the creaky door warped
By an accident and stayed there until night passed.
.
But you shut your hoodie in the door, broke your zipper
And called it a day with tears in your eyes
Like I couldn't see the truth.
.
What sort of shadow would I be
If I couldn't see the truth pouring out of that
Aching soul of yours, the one that dreams like it fucks.
.
Hard with a relentless rhythm that you think will get you
Everything you've ever hoped to want
When you know it won't.
.
You know that this run,
Can't end in anything other than ruin.
But maybe that's why you do it, to play pretend with the cosmos.
.
Maybe that's the ultimate cost of leaving, enduring the shadows
That swarm and swim in the mind, while dreaming
Of some other, impossible end.
About the Creator
Silver Daux
Shadowed souls, cursed magic, poetry that tangles itself in your soul and yanks out the ugly darkness from within. Maybe there's something broken in me, but it's in you too.
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Comments (13)
Good poem and writing
👏👏👏 Take a bow! Another stellar performance in from the mind that is Silver Daux. 🤩
😮💨 Well that was heavy as sin, in the best way of course!! I love the spite behind this piece!! Congrats on Top Story, SD!
“No body leaves like you do, in that mocking way” Oh HOT DAMN Silver! That was a beautiful line! This poem was almost painful to read, dredging up old memories. Fantastically well deserved Top Story!
Congrats 🍾🎊🎉🎈 on top Story!
Visceral and raw. Wonderfully done. ❤️ Congratulations on Top Story!
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Gosh, this was stunning. If I could write poetry, I'd want it to be like this. Great top story.
Wonderful, wonderful work, once again. Congrats on the TS.
Back to say congratulations on a totally unsurprising and deserved Top Story!
You always manage to take such singularly unique bits of imagery and imbue them with so much emotional resonance! Like "But you shut your hoodie in the door, broke your zipper And called it a day with tears in your eyes". Consistently impressive time and time again!
These lines showed such artistic craft: "And the clouds listen to you, who knows why." "Maybe that's the ultimate cost of leaving, enduring the shadows." You are going places Silver Daux. Going places I tell ya!
Sheesh. You always manage to take my breath away and make me want to go back to the drawing board/lab. This had such a smooth flow to it...the story/narrative carried along effortlessly with no clunkiness or awkwardness, but lots of spaces where I had to take a pause, and reread some of the stunning phrases and words you used. It had a very visceral quality to it, as so many of your poems and pieces do, felt all the jagged edges and burning sensation. Well done.