Winter's Scout
Before Autumn is done, Winter sends out its messenger.
There's a moment where the air starts to crisp.
It's after the mists have risen from saturating the land.
Colour vacations somewhere else,
Whilst the moisture which springs from warm Summer's exit,
Provides a modesty screen,
Behind which a change is taking place.
Look closely and you might see it-
But be prepared to get wet.
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There's a transition between Summer's brash vibrancy:
From its "in-yer-face-I'm-going-to-make-you-sweat-come-here-sweetheart"-edness
Which ends with the exhausted death cry of leaves, screaming crimson
And arguing orange, searchlight-yellow echoing sunshine at times,
Protesting initially, but then falling, falling, falling -
Twisty turny, floating down.
Before the fall as Fall takes hold
Look from afar if you can for the full effect
For if you go too close, you'll see the scars
From the brown scorches of Autumn's blowtorch,
Leaving patches and spots on the leaves' bright surface
As it ripped through forests and woods and parks
And watched excitedly as nature curled and recoiled, shrinking down
Eventually to vanish.
You can smell Autumn's approach if you sniff hard enough
Once Summer turns its back.
Watch it too in the frenzy of the wasps
As they rave crazedly around Summer's projects
Left, where they lie, left, on the ground,
Wantonly left,
Squelching, supine and still.
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These are the drinks and hor d'oeuvres before the main event.
The pre-show party vibes of anticipation.
Sky sharpens its blue and maple reddens the carpet
As clouds part, like curtains, and Frost descends.
The mist, once so pervasive, becomes solid sheets,
In an instant,
Crystalline-patterned manifestations materialise
Before our very eyes!
Snap!
The world becomes brittle, edged.
Its delineations are clear, surrounded with white,
The glass dust of ice falling
As Winter rubs it to powder through its slender firm fingers,
And it lands as falling shards of cold confetti
That coat and cluster and crunch.
Winter does not care where it lands
Nor does it care if you deem it treacherous.
It is there to draw out your caution and your care
To poke you and prod you with chilling certainty.
But Winter will admit, darling, it is for show too.
Its brilliance is dazzling, designed to hurt eyes
That can't look away.
Gaze at the intricate patterns it creates:
Skeletal webs etched geometrically - the mark of its art.
Frost is like the Banksy of nature
Appearing suddenly, a graffiti installation to boggle the mind
Which draws wonder and surprise in its randomness.
There is a difference though:
Frost is fleeting,
Winter's scout.
Enjoy its clear cold lens while it lasts
And the steel shine it brings -
Before long it will become smothered too,
Like everything it's touched,
By the full onslaught of Winter's conquest.
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Comments (34)
Enthralling take on the challengeβ¦ well deserved placing!ππ€© I especially like: β Colour vacations somewhere else, Whilst the moisture which springs from warm Summer's exit, Provides a modesty screen, Behind which a change is taking place.βπ
congrats on the win ππππ
Returning, Rachel, to congratulate you on your winβ£π₯°
Congratulations on the Runner up !!!!:))))))
Circling back to say congrats on placing Runner-up Rachel!!!
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! ππππππ
Well done chum on placing!
Woaw so Amazing Congratulations on Your Top Story Your piece is so verbally mesmerising in all kinds of beings and levels β€οΈβ€οΈπππYou are a great observer and your way of writing is a masterpiece of your natural expression and being you do it in such a playful way expressing yourself fully into it all π₯πΈπ©·it's a pleasure to read You !
I love how you personify Summer Autumn and Winter with such distinct personalities it brings a playful yet powerful energy to the transitions.
Wonderful work! I love these lines especially: β As Winter rubs it to powder through its slender firm fingers, And it lands as falling shards of cold confettiβ - what a lush visual you paint. Bravo!
Circling back around Rachel, to say congrats on placing honourable mention this week!!
Wow. I love how you created characters out of the seasons. It being a new realness
I love the personification of frost "winter's scout" in this Rachel!! Congrats on Top Story!!
Wooohooooo congratulations on your Leaderboard placement! ππππππ
Hello Rachel Deeming! Am I... Ach can't do it lol... Well done chum, this was beautiful and a great entry. Great Top Story, Congratulations
congratulations on your top story...beautiful work, as always
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Hello Rachel Deeming!! Am I ask a question please?
Great! Congratulations on your top story πππ
A wonderful meditation in verse on the shifting of seasons. Deftly done, Deeming!
Absolutely lovely, Rachel, and a big congratulations on your Top Story. Well done!!
BritBud ~ βBanksy..?β In-Yer-Face Backatcha..! CalBud
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This does not seem like a British winter. Far too assertive! Like how I kind of expect winter to be. I love the modesty screen image!
Beautifully written. I love how you captured the tension between Summerβs retreat and Winterβs arrival.