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I gasp; you arrive.
I sigh; you’re turning thirteen.
Steal my breath away...
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Comments (12)
Children grow so fast and always amazed us for sure. Nicely done 🥰
So few words, so much said ❤️ Lovely
Thirteen. Saucy experiments on becoming little terrors. Love em and - you gotta love em. Be prepared. Lovely sentiments here.
❤️😢😭. Got me!
Have a soon to be 16 and a 20 year old. So this got me right in the feels. well done
Loved the gasp and the sigh. That was so deep! Brilliant!
Fabulous!!!💕💕💖
Oh, if only we could let time linger ❤. Take my love and subscription and go 🤗
My two are 41 and 38, way ahead of you , lovely words though
Very nicely done.
I love the relationship between verbs, “gasp” and “sigh” in relation to breath. Well done!
Aw Holly, this got my heart 🥹❤️ Well done!