What is this feeling?
I don't have a clue what's happening here
His laughter was the autumn wind that tossed me around like colorful leaves
Especially if we were laughing together
Standing next to him was standing in an autumn forest that screams in yellow, red, and orange
If I got lost in his eyes
I'd be stary eyed and lost in wonder
Lost entirely on my own
Brown crunchy leaves beneath my feet
But I'm looking up like a wanderlust youth
wanting to explore every inch of this forest
I've never seen so much color
What a soul to marvel
I would've chosen to stay lost in forest if I were blind
The sunset bursting through the leaves
His moon lighting up my darkest nights
I've never felt more admiration
I didn't realize I was falling
Falling
Tripping over thorns and dead roses
Landed on my face
Bloody hands and scraped knees
I don't know what I'm supposed to think
But I know I'll miss this place
Right now I don't know much more than this
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Bixi Hernandez
Hi! I'm Bixi. Your red lip coffee sipping bestie. Using my tears as pen ink is what I do best. Enjoy!
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Standing While Falling
Quotation from Friedrich Nietzsche "He who wrestles long with monsters should beware lest he himself become a monster. And if you gaze long into an abyss, the abyss also gazes into you. Man is not destroyed by suffering, but by the meaning he makes of it."
By LUCCIAN LAYTH7 days ago in Critique
Comments (8)
Absolutely stunning! Pain and beauty, love and confusion. Also congrats on top story!
Naice
The shift from awe to pain is so honest. You captured that confusing in between feeling perfectly.
Back to say congratulations on your Top Story! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Stunning work I feel deeply for this peace, very real indeed.
This is beautifully evocative. It feels fantastic and real
I feel this deeply. Beautifully expressed 🖤
Oh no, it started off so sweetly but it ended sadly. Sending you lots of love and hugs ❤️