The day your steps leave the home behind,
The plea for comfort will be buried and confined,
You’ll adorn yourself, no wish will remain,
For your soul will be freed from dreams so vain.
Don’t lose yourself in sorrow, O traveler,
You won’t find smiles in hearts so far,
Your loneliness is the pain that fills,
The empty spaces of hearts, where your dream still chills.
Don’t witness this scene with open eyes,
Close them, and see where peace truly lies,
Your heart, though empty, will grow heavy with weight,
Your eyes will fill, and the light within will dissipate.
About the Creator
Karan w.
Writer || Poet || Author
Author of "The Resonance–Two Together-Lost Forever
All worlds collapse the moment they touch the ground of reality—worlds I once created. Yet I find my bliss in the dissolution of my creations
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Comments (13)
Nothing is more important than inner peace, which the light of love scatters. Every step may hide pain, but the sky always smiles upon its children.
You created such a longing that is truly hauntingly beuatiful. I love the feel of this.
Hey Sk, do you want to do a part two for a new story and then we can see if Komal and Maryam want to continue it with a part three and maybe a four?
this is a work of poetic art, poignant and heartbreaking! thats all i can say
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Oh my word, the first line made me so sad. It’s tear stirringly beautiful. It definitely set the tone of this poem. Oh gosh. ‘For your soul will be freed from dreams so vain.’ It’s like saying the persons departure will not leave room to remember what they left behind. Their lives will be too adorned by the everyday hustle and bustle… * Sk! My gosh you’ve got such a talent when it comes to writing elegies. The second quatrain blows my mind. Whatever negative feeling this traveler might be feeling, could be linked to the feeling that he left in the hearts of those he would not bring with him. In other words ‘I miss you’ said the ones left behind. Oh my, oh my oh my, I loved this so much! ‘Your heart, though empty, will grow heavy with weight, Your eyes will fill, and the light within will dissipate.’ 😭😭😭 This was so sad, but a complete masterpiece 👌🏽👏🏽♥️🤗
Beautiful and powerful at the same time! ✨😊Great job!
one word Deep!
💙 beautiful
Very Beautiful post ✨
Can I say; These days you're actually leveling up so much 😃🤗🤝 It has this beautiful blend of deep, melancholic beauty, weaving sorrow and longing in every line with such grace. Hats off, man!
This was so poignant and beautifully penned. Loved it!
This is so nostalgic and touching, very well written