They touch;
Tentative, tender.
Twenty-two, tireless, they think they're
Timeless,
Though their towns tie them tight.
Toxic, toxic, they threaten, they test;
Terrified too, they're torn,
Thirst to take the trigger,
to trip, to triumph.
This? This? This?
About the Creator
Elle F.
I am a chair.
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Outstanding
Excellent work. Looking forward to reading more!
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Heartfelt and relatable
The story invoked strong personal emotions
Excellent storytelling
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Comments (28)
Twenty-two, tireless, they think they're Timeless Brilliant. Sorry I missed this. Great piece, Lauren.
Brilliant work, felt like I was there and twenty two! <3
A real story, full of feeling, and executed so well in the strict Tautogram format. Congratulations on the well-deserved win.
This was such an awesome story told given the constraints of a Tautogram!! Brilliant and evocative! Cograts on your placement!!! 💫
Genius-level rhyme that between tireless and timeless. Really captivating storytelling, which given the tautogram constrains is just outstanding. Also, loved the final line.
Very nice. Congratulations!
So lovely. The line 'they think they're timeless' really hit home for me. Congratulations on the 2nd place win!
Extremely talented. Congratulations on second place!
This is lovely, very thoughtful.
You write with such depth. I see why your piece made 2nd place. Well done and well deserved 🤗
You painted quite a picture with so few words. Congratulations on the win!
Very nicely done. Congrats
Congratulations 🎉😊
You captured the gamble perfectly with "Thirst to take the trigger, to trip, to triumph." Excellently done.
Very very nice.
Painful and tense... inside such few words. Well done and congratulations!
Congratulations, I love this. I also love when you wrote- "they think they're timeless."
Congratulations 💯🎉💖✨😉
This is amazing! Congrats!
Love this, Lauren! Beautiful tribute to this age and time of life. Congrats on a well-deserved win and thank you for sharing this piece with us! Can’t wait to read more.
Very good, congratulations well deserved
Congrats on second place. Beautifully written poem.
Congratulations!!!
Congrats on second place, beautiful, well done, my entries were not creative enough.
Oh I love this! Succinct, evocative, complete. My favourite entry, for sure. Congrats on taking out second place, Lauren!!