if tomorrow starts without me
will you grope your sheets
in your sleep drunk haze
to find me.
will you gather my panties
strewn hastily
on your bedroom floor
and ball them in your fists.
will you fill the kettle
with too much water
and drink your coffee
lukewarm
because it takes too long to boil.
if tomorrow starts without me
will it take a million years
for the sun to set
or will the daylight spill
like honey in your eyes
while i stay forever in the darkness
because my day never starts without you.
if tomorrow starts without me
it starts without you, too.
About the Creator
Sara
Don’t look for love.
Be love.
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Standing While Falling
Quotation from Friedrich Nietzsche "He who wrestles long with monsters should beware lest he himself become a monster. And if you gaze long into an abyss, the abyss also gazes into you. Man is not destroyed by suffering, but by the meaning he makes of it."
By LUCCIAN LAYTH5 days ago in Critique
Comments (20)
Wonderful
Beautiful
Mind-blowing and awesome—I loved it! This is a masterpiece. The way you’ve expressed the feelings is so deep. Kudos to you 💯.
Congrats on the Top Story! This is so beautifully written. You set such a complex scene in so few words. Loved it!
Congratulations Sara.
Congratulations on the top story! This beautifully written poem evokes scenes from a film that could have been broken down into stanzas! Well done!
Ohh this is brilliant! And I am somehow only seeing it after I just published my top three. In a way I’m glad - because I would have had to rethink the list… but I’m also sorry I missed it ! I am glad to see it’s a top story though!!! Well deserved ❤️
This piece of art deserves awards 🏆
Thanks for sharing Sara
Such a sweet read
So, so profound.
Absolutely stunning! So creatively written with the message so clear!
So stunning. The pain in the missing of physical connection, the despair in the daily mundane, and the great vastness of overwhelming questions are all sewn together in this capturing piece. I loved all of it.
Beautiful poem, Sara. Well done! Congratulations on a well-deserved Top Story!
Beautifully written. Congrats on the TS.
This was such a poignant poem with so many wonderful lines. I love the part about the kettle being too full and lukewarm tea....Congratulations on Top Story - it's well-deserved.
This was profound and the ending was perfect😍
Lovely piece of poetry!
So creative
Very nice. I also drink my coffee lukewarm. Just swallow it down in a gulp because it's not worth the effort. I was wondering where the line about the panties would go. Nicely done!