Together it's an Ocean, alone it's a Drop

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I love the flow and how you used the stories to create a deep inspiring poem.

Oh that first line got me good ‘ together it’s an ocean alone is a drop’ it’s always safer to be together than alone. It is not good for one to be alone, that’s when we hurt and when we break, then it becomes harder for us to trust then the cycle continues from there. ‘A wolf a wolf’ when I repeated it, it sounded like a howl. That’s really cool. ‘You all just cry but you never try’ a smack on the wrist but a kind wake-up call. I do remember jack and Jill This poem was such a lovely read. A beautiful pick me up for when I’m in need. Because of you, now I know, that I will rise like an ace. If I stay steadfast and firm. Keep writing, keep inspiring 👏🏽👌🏽♥️🤗

I recognised the boy who cried wolf, the crow, Jack and Jill, and the tortoise and the rabbit. I'm so sorry that I missed this beautiful poem the first time you published it

A nice collection of lines that stir up memories. My mother was great at teaching lessons with parables and moral sayings. Thank you Maryam.

I really like your flow on this one. Great sense of rhythm.

Love the symbolism when thinking of an ocean and a drop. I think of friends joining together, linking arms and they represent the ocean.

How lovely how you put those legends in a single poem!

I too like Sam remember my mother saying when I made a face, I hope your face doesn't freeze that way. I learned not to make faces in cold weather. Nicely done!!!!!!

I just remember my mother saying if you stick out your tongue your face might freeze that way! 😋

VERY GOOD ARTICLE(story-wisdom-advice) Thank you Batool

Masha Allah!✨💕 Maryam, this poem is so beautiful, it holds many valuable life lessons.🤌🏼 "Be patient and firm to get the first place The tortoise was also slow, yet it won the race" Those were my favourite lines, so true and motivational!💗😊

Superb! Keep it up :)

Wow! My dear sister, your creativity is truly remarkable. The way you’ve woven together multiple stories into this poem feels like you’ve captured the essence of all those narratives. You’re quite clever!😇 However, I believe we should never crave the first position, especially when we trust in a higher power like God. If we possess talent and capability, it doesn’t matter if we come first, second, or third. To achieve first place, one must engage in competition, and competition breeds jealousy, which leads to sin. That is detrimental. Many lose faith in themselves just because they didn’t come first, failing to recognize their talent and capabilities. You’re well aware of this competition for first place in students' lives and its consequences. Don’t pay too much attention to my words, I was just sitting idle and thought I’d share some wisdom with you. 😄 Make sure to study; you have exams coming up!🧐