time of dying
(autumn leaves haiku, var. 2)
Photo by Autumn Mott Rodeheaver on Unsplash
in one woodsmoke breath
summer dismembers itself,
raining shards of flame.
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Comments (14)
Wow this is so good. I can't even pick a favorite line because each line is beautiful. But the way you carry us through each powerful line is also wonderful. I'm probably going to be recalling "summer dismembers itself" all through the fall. Powerful. Such a well deserved win.
Congratulations on your win, Raistlin; beautiful haiku!🍂
Winner of winners, this one. A stand-out among stand-outs ☺ 👏
Literally beautiful! Congrats!
There's so much energy in this piece! Love your word choice.
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! 🎉💖🎊🎉💖🎊
Strong imagery here. Congrats on the contest win! You deserved it.
My that's a powerful one and a breath stopping read! Well done on your win Raistlin!
I love how you created almost a horror movie out of your haiku - "breath" and "dismembers" and "shards" and "flame." Nicely gothic feel to the poem. Congrats on the win!
Beautiful! Perfectly and artistically descriptive of summer’s lovely grand finale! Congrats!!! 🎉
Wow, love this. The violence in the language is a sharp contrast to how peaceful the season feels. Great job. Well deserved win!
Love the intense imagery, great job, congratulations
Wow! Great job! “Raining shards of flame”, what a great image! Your victory is well deserved!
Such a lovely wind down for summer. Congratulations on your win! 🥳