This Morning's Gift
A Frosted Trenta-Sei
The autumn chill intensifies.
I see the fragile veil of white
Scintillating, as the sunrise
Dispels the ebon shade of night.
Winter comes soon, on its white wings
To bring sweet sleep to growing things.
~
I see the fragile veil of white,
The breath of Gaia, captive, there
On all it brushed throughout the night,
Glistening in the frigid air.
Beauty that belies the warning
Of the frost on this cold morning
~
The breath of Gaia, captive there,
Ephemeral and elegant,
Has nonetheless come to declare
The season's patience waxes scant.
Soon, the autumn's soft, peaceful hush
Will surrender to winter's rush.
~
Ephemeral and elegant
And soon, naught but a memory,
As all the wonders nature can't
Keep held in check for you and me.
All the more precious is this gift,
For with the sun, it's passing's swift.
~
And soon, naught but a memory,
This morning's gift to grateful eyes,
Will stir a tired heart, faithfully
When December clouds future skies.
Winter's chill won't dim its luster,
Though it bellow, blow and bluster.
~
This morning's gift to grateful eyes
Was wondrous and enlightening
And having seen, I realize
Life is a rare and wondrous thing
And like the sparkling frost at dawn,
It should be savored, ere it's gone.
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Author's Note: I wanted to try a new form, and I came up with an interesting one. Credited to the late poet, John Ciardi (1916 - 1986) it's a 36-line poem, written in six, 6-line stanzas, with a rhyming scheme of ababcc, and an interesting twist:
The second line of each stanza becomes the first line of the following stanza.
Apparently, punctuation is optional.
I found it fairly challenging and a fun exercise.
Here's a resource if you'd like to try it:
Thanks for reading!
~Doc
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Dana Crandell
Dad, Stepdad, Grandpa, Husband, lover of Nature and dogs.
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My poetry collection: Life, Love & Ludicrosity
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Comments (50)
Life is a rare and wondrous thing. Absolutely beautiful. Nicely done!!!
I always love to learn about poetic forms new to me, and I've never heard of the Trenta-Sei. Thanks for including the link! You do such a masterful job of weaving in vivid imagery into the format and rhyme scheme that the words just flow effortlessly as I read your poem. Nicely done - congrats!
Congratulations on Runner Up - Well Deserved!!
Beautiful poetry style, and equally beautiful lyrics. Congratulations, Dana!
This is a wonderful poem and a beautiful exploration of an unusual poetic form. Congratulations on placing in the challenge! Richly deserved!
HTey had no choice but to acknowledge this. Congratulations
A challenging poetic form to be sure but you NAILED it Dana! Masterfully done and a well-deserved place on this challenge leaderboard. Congratulations!
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Congrats, Dana! Splendidly done!!
Yayayayayayay!!! Dana!!! Congrats on Runner up in the Frosted Verse Challenge!! π
Wooohooooo congratulations on your win! ππππππ
Back to say congratulations on placing in the challenge Dana!
A well-deserved TS, Dana. I love the imagery - taken by the breath of Gaia there.
This is beautiful and an interesting form - great job!! I loved it. Congrats on the well-deserved TS π₯³π₯³π₯³
This is wonderfully done!! Beautifully composed lines and a great message. Really interesting form that Iβll have to try sometime! Thanks for sharing it!
This was a delightful read with rhyme, rhythm & format. The things I learn on Vocal! Maybe Iβll give this style a go one day!π€
Beautiful poem, Dana. Such thought and effort went into this. Impressive work!
Congratulations on top story!!
Wow, so, so beautifully done, Dana! Love this so much!
Congratulations for winning the 1st place π₯°
Back again to say congrats on most discussed story this week!! π
Wooohooooo congratulations on being the Most Discussed Story! ππππππ
Congratulations, very well deserved my friend
Wow! Congratulations on winning 1st place for Most Discussed Story this weekπππ Quite deserving
Beautiful and richβfull of gorgeous imagery and beautiful lessons. Very impressed with the style as well! Stunning work, my friend!